Talk:Adventure Time season 5/GA1

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: 1ST7 (talk · contribs) 07:24, 10 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll review this article. Initial comments will hopefully be posted soon. --1ST7 (talk) 07:24, 10 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

@1ST7:: just a heads-up that Blurred Lines has been blocked indefinitely for sockpuppetry. You might just give this a week to see if the block sticks and then fail it, unless someone else wants to step into the breach. -- Khazar2 (talk) 23:25, 11 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Thanks for the notification. That's unfortunate. I'll give it a week to see if the nominator is cleared; if not, then I'll fail it. --1ST7 (talk) 02:05, 12 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
I'd be willing to fix any issues! I've also replaced myself as the nominator, as I'm actually the one who has done the most work on the page. Don't know if that's kosher or not. :)--Gen. Quon (Talk) 17:06, 12 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Great! Thanks for taking this up. I will try to have the initial comments posted in the next few hours. --1ST7 (talk) 03:40, 13 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

Here's the review:

  1. Well-written  
    • In the lead, the information on the season's reception probably shouldn't be in the same paragraph as production. Please merge the third paragraph and the first part of the second paragraph together; then move the part about the awards to be a separate third paragraph.
      Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:17, 13 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
    • "The season has been storyboarded and written by..." Can you switch "has been" to "was"?
      Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:17, 13 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
  2. Verifiable with no original research:  
    • Refs 47, 69, 51, 71, 28, 31, and 25 are to Twitter.
    • Refs 6, 23, 54, 65, and 92 are to Tumblr.
    • Refs 21, 30, and 46 are to YouTube. I don't believe any of these websites are allowed to be used as sources on Wikipedia.
      While it is true that many of these are self-published sources, all of them are from either the production staff (most of the Twitter cites are from writers/producers from the series announcing guest stars, and most of the Tumblr sources are the writers talking about behind-the-scenes info). The YouTube ones are largely interviews, and I believe would be allowed since they are primary sources (one is a video a panel presentation, and the other is an interview with Hynden Walch). Since none of these sources are unduly self-serving, involve claims about third parties, or involve claims about events not directly related to the source, as well as the fact that there is no reasonable doubt as to its authenticity, and the article is not based primarily on such sources (15 out of 116 is only about 13%), they fulfill the criteria to be included per WP:SELFPUB.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:17, 13 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
    I read through WP:SELFPUB and now believe that the sources used should be alright (seeing as the manual specifically states that Twitter and Tumblr are allowed as sources if they meet the criteria, which they seem to in this case). --1ST7 (talk) 06:41, 14 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
  3. Broad in its coverage:  
    • There is currently only one reviewer quoted in the section on reviews and accolades. Is it possible to add more?
      I'll try to add a few more.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:19, 13 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
      I added another paragraph from The A.V. Club. That's all I can really find at the moment, since the season isn't over yet.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:39, 14 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
  4. Neutral:  
  5. Stable:  
    • "According to both storyboard artist Jesse Moynihan and storyboard artist and former character designer Andy Ristaino, the season will contain 52 episodes, twice the normal number of episodes per season." This looks like it could go out of date in the near future. Per WP:REALTIME, it's best to avoid using present tense. How about "storyboard artist Jesse Moynihan and storyboard artist and former character designer Andy Ristaino confirmed that the season will contain 52 episodes, twice the normal number of episodes per season"?
      Done.--Gen. Quon (Talk) 18:17, 13 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
  6. Illustrated, if possible, by images:  

Thanks again for taking up the task of responding to comments. I'll put this on hold for a week to give you time to address these issues. --1ST7 (talk) 06:00, 13 November 2013 (UTC)Reply

How does it all look now?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 19:39, 14 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Good. Just one question left: as the season is not yet finished, are you planning to continue updating the article until it is complete? I'm asking to be certain that any future episodes added to the list will comply with the Wikipedia manual of style. --1ST7 (talk) 07:54, 15 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Yes, I do plan on it. I've been working on this article since it was created in November of 2012, and I don't plan on stopping any time soon! :)--Gen. Quon (Talk) 15:48, 15 November 2013 (UTC)Reply
Alright, it's good to go then. Congratulations, and thanks for your work! --1ST7 (talk) 03:24, 16 November 2013 (UTC)Reply