Talk:A Transfer/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by TeenAngels1234 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:08, 13 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:08, 13 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Infobox and lead edit

  • In the infobox, use "plainlist" instead of "<br/>" per the rules on the template.  Done
  • Is the "|story=Gainax" parameter necessary?
  • A Transfer" → "A Transfer"  Done
  • What does "7.1% rating" mean?
It means that 7.1% of Japan's televisions were tuned to Tokyo TV during the run. I took it for granted, given the percentage.

Plot edit

  • The plot is 417 words, while it should be under 400 per WP:TVPLOT.  Done
  • Remove the comma after "poorly for Nerv".
Removed.

Production edit

  • What exactly is "a mount" within the context of the show?
Specified.

Cultural references and themes edit

  • The caption on the image should describe its significance within the article.
  • Also improve the non-free use rationales of the images (see MOS:TVIMAGE for help).
Hope it helps.
  • "awkward communication. ... Evangelion" → "awkward communication [...] Evangelion"
Fixed.
  • "the sixties inspire" → "the 1960s inspired"  Done
  • Wikipedia doesn't normally use phrases like "he said" so try rewording the sentence.  Done
  • References should be included at the end of each quote, so recite certain sources.  Done
  • "A transfer" → "A Transfer"  Done

Reception edit

  • Again, explain what "7.1% rating" means and/or refers to.
  • The second reference after "home video releases" is missing parts of its title.  Done
  • "as it shows" → "as it showed"  Done

Notes and references edit

  • Change the "Notes" header to "References", add a subsection titled "Citations" and make the original "References" section into a "Bibliography" subsection (example).  Done
  • Archive all archivable sources (either manually or with this tool).  Done
  • Optional, but it helps readers if you link websites within the "|website=" parameter.  Done


@Some Dude From North Carolina:Tried my best.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 19:49, 14 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Progress edit

GA review
(see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):  
    b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):  
    b (citations to reliable sources):  
    c (OR):  
    d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):  
    b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales):  
    b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  

Overall:
Pass/Fail:  

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