Talk:A Hunka Hunka Burns in Love/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Matthew RD 17:50, 4 March 2011 (UTC)

Hello, I shall be conducting the review. -- Matthew RD 17:50, 4 March 2011 (UTC)

Lets see how the article goes against the GA criteria:

1. Well written: Fails at present. See notes below
2. Factually accurate and verifiable: Duly cited throughout. Passed.
3. Broad in coverage: No issues there. Passed.
4. Neutral: No issues there either. Passed.
5. Stable: No edit war over past few months. Passed.
6. Images: All checks out fine. Non free image uses the right tags. "Excellent" (Passed)

• In the second to last paragraph, it would perhaps be better if you describe how Gloria saves Burns. (Burns was overcome by the smoke after saving Gloria, but then it was Gloria who carried him to safety). However, it is not a major thing. Doesn't have to be done, but probably a little better.
  • I removed it and added "... however he is soon overcome by the smoke and Gloria is then seen carrying him to safety." in its stead. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:56, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
• "this episode is dedicated to the memory of George Harrison" Where's the capitalisation in the sentence? Where's the full stop? Why isn't George Harrison linked? Also I noticed it was added by an IP. I'm not sure if this sentence has any significance to the article.
  • I have no idea why it's there. Removed it. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:56, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
• "Originally, the episode would end with Burns taking the medicine," What medicine?
  • Clarified it. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:56, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
• According to WP:Manual of Style#Quotation marks, the method of the quotation marks used (the typographic style) is not recommended by Wikipedia, please use the more standard "typewriter" marks.
  • Done. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:56, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
• Also read the section below, quotes often end in a full stop first, then quote marks (for example, "a little more exciting.", not "a little more exciting".)
  • Done. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:56, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
• "Colin Jacobsson,writing for DVD Movie Guide," give a space there please.
  • Done. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:56, 4 March 2011 (UTC)

Other than that, it was an "excellent" read. Just a few issues here and there. I will place it on hold until the issues are addressed. Good luck. -- Matthew RD 18:49, 4 March 2011 (UTC)

• Thanks! I've now edited the article following your instructions, so I hope it's ready to pass. If there's any concerns, just tell me. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:56, 4 March 2011 (UTC)

  Thank you for addressing the issues quite quickly, well done, GA pass. -- Matthew RD 20:13, 4 March 2011 (UTC)