Talk:ARA Moreno/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by The ed17 in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Ironholds (talk) 19:22, 20 June 2010 (UTC)Reply

  • "two million pounds sterling" - link the current value.
  • "Argentine Naval Commission's chief, which was overseeing " - appears to be "the chief, which was overseeing", and thus grammatically incorrect. The second Argentina also seems extraneous. I suggest rearranging it as "Isabel Betbeder, wife to the chief of the Argentine Naval Commission, which was overseeing the construction of the ship"
    • Done, but not with your quite with your wording (may want to double-check me :) —Ed (talkmajestic titan) 03:42, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • "United States' State Department" - United States Department of State, and link.
    • Done, there was a link earlier but it wasn't very prominent, so I added it again. —Ed (talkmajestic titan) 03:42, 22 June 2010 (UTC)Reply
  • "The trials were plagued with serious engine trouble. They culminated on 2 November, when an entire turbine failed," - "The trials were plagued with serious engine trouble, culminating with the failure of an entire turbine on 2 November. Moreno was forced to put in at Rockland, Maine..." and so on. Ironholds (talk) 19:22, 20 June 2010 (UTC)Reply