Talk:38th (Welsh) Infantry Division/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 03:51, 12 March 2016 (UTC)

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:51, 12 March 2016 (UTC)

• No DABs, external links OK.
• Images appropriately licensed.
• Link corps,
• 50,000 strong hyphenate these as a compound adjective. and this as well jump off

   Done

• with it seen as political formation that was poorly trained and led rephrase this bit.

   Done

• among senior officers add a "the" after "among"

   Done

• over several months ceasing to exist comma after "months"

   Done

• I like the collapsible OB at the beginning of WWI section. More later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 02:41, 14 March 2016 (UTC)

  Thanks EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:18, 22 March 2016 (UTC)

• for a protracted war envisioned by the military elite elite reads badly here. How about planners or leaders/leadership?

   Done

• Was the division any more or less trained than the other divisions of the time?

  From what I have been reading, it is slightly complicated. The British official historian of the Somme campaign criticized all the New Army divisions for lacking training in fire and movement, ill-experienced officers, mollycoddling staff officers, and a lack of initiative throughout their organizations. Per this source, historians have picked up on this. However, Peter Simkins argue that the situation is more complicated. Open to thoughts on this.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:18, 22 March 2016 (UTC)

  I added a brief note into the article noting that it was a similar criticism for New Army divisions.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 21:42, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

• Is the Clive Hughes quote in the Beckett & Simpson book?

  Amended.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:18, 22 March 2016 (UTC)

• For his actions, Owen's was mentioned in dispatches No apostrophe 's'.

   Done

• distrusting Officer Corps Do not capitalize this.

   Done

• and Traver's contributes errant apostrophe and here It's actions with both divisions

   Done

• Clarify when Blackader assumes command.

   Done

• by the Edward Prince of Wales Done up to WW2 section, more later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 17:19, 17 March 2016 (UTC)

  Amended. Thanks for the review, and I look forward to your additional comments. Regards, EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 15:18, 22 March 2016 (UTC)

• although its constituted units Do you mean constituent here?

  Amended.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 21:42, 30 March 2016 (UTC)

• , for medical reasons, or for not being fully fit or fully trained, or for other reasons it occurs to me that all of this could be shortened to "for a variety of reasons, including lack of training or medically unfit". Just a thought; you're not obligated in any way to adopt it if it doesn't suit.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:54, 25 March 2016 (UTC)

  I like the suggestion, and I have added it into the article. Again, thank you for your review.EnigmaMcmxc (talk) 21:42, 30 March 2016 (UTC)