Talk:2016 Spanish Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 18:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)

I'll take on this review. What a historic day for all of motorsport. Z105space (talk) 18:52, 10 June 2016 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

General

• One thing I keep noting in your articles is that you sometimes spell the drivers' full names out after the first instance. It's best to avoid this.

• Hmm, I always try to keep the prose flowing, with full names often in new sections, to make it a little easier for readers who might not read the entire article... Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:25, 17 June 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• The first mention of team-mate should be unhyphened as is seen in the rest of the article for consistency.
• "Max Verstappen won the race upon his debut for his new team Red Bull, having swapped his Toro Rosso seat with Daniil Kvyat ahead of the race." - try to avoid repetition of the word "race"; in the second instance it should be "event".

Both  Done

Free practice

• "two ninety-minute practice sessions" -ninety-minute should be spelt in number form per MOS:NUMBERS for consistency with high-value numbers as is seen in the article.

 Done

• "The Mercedes of Rosberg and Hamilton followed," - This may sound better: "Mercedes teammates Rosberg and Hamilton followed,"

 Done

• "Force India's Sergio Pérez managed only nine laps as he spent much of the session in the pits after smoke emerged from the rear of his car." - pits is slang and should be avoided, pit lane is better.

 Done

• "Upon beginning his preparation laps for qualifying, Rosberg had to come back into the pits," - ditto.

 Done

Qualifying

• fifty-second should be spelt in number form.

According to MOS:NUMERAL, fifty-second is acceptable.

• "The two Red Bulls - Red Bull cars

 Done

Race

• "When Vettel pitted on lap 16," -pitted is slang, rewrite to "made a pit stop"

 Done

• "he emerged third behind the two Red Bulls," - as in the qualifying section, change to "Red Bull cars"

 Done

• "By lap twenty," - should be spelt in number form for consistency.

 Done

References

• No dead links

That is all I found. On hold until the issues have been addressed. Z105space (talk) 08:51, 14 June 2016 (UTC)

@Z105space: Should be good to go. Thank you for another swift review! Zwerg Nase (talk) 19:33, 17 June 2016 (UTC)

@Zwerg Nase: I can now pass. Once again, good work! Z105space (talk) 19:46, 17 June 2016 (UTC)