Talk:2015 Japanese Grand Prix/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Zwerg Nase in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 18:21, 29 January 2016 (UTC)Reply


I will review this one. Z105space (talk) 18:21, 29 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

Lead

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General

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Background

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  • "Pirelli cites the nature of the track and the high lateral energy loads experienced in the corners, in particular 130R — typically taken at full throttle and top speed in dry weather racing — as reasons for the hardest tyres being used. The suppliers expect a performance difference of 0.6-0.8 seconds per lap between the compounds." - Change all the uses of present tense words to past tense words.
  • Spell out DRS and put the acronym in brackets.
  • "Mercedes were leading Ferrari by 153 points," - was?
  Done apart from last point; discussion at nominator's talk-page. Eagleash (talk) 11:50, 31 January 2016 (UTC)Reply
  Done

Free practice

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  • "there were two 1.5-hour sessions on Friday and another one-hour session before qualifying on Saturday" - 1.5 hour should be reworded to 90-minute.
  • "as Valtteri Bottas saved wet weather tyres." - wet weather tyres needs hyphenating.
  • "Red Bull's Daniel Ricciardo was third," Red Bull's should be spelt as Red Bull driver.
  • "Behind Ricciardo, both Williams led the two Ferraris in a session marked by all drivers doing a lot of laps due to the limited running on Friday." - I feel this sentence should be rewritten.
  Done Eagleash (talk) 12:07, 31 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

Qualifying

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  • Wikilink red flag to Racing flags#Red flag as the non-motor sport expert will not understand what it is.
  • Change Manor Marussias to either Manor Marussia cars or drivers.
  Done Eagleash (talk) 12:08, 31 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

Race

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  • You start many sentences with On lap xxx. Consider revising.   Done
  • "Hamilton went into pit lane for a tyre change on lap 16." - You're missing the word "the" before pit lane.  Done Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

Post-race

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  • "with Williams in third an additional 129 points behind the Scuderia." - use a different word other than Scuderia.
  Done Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

References

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  • No dead links
  • Reference 42's publisher should be formula1.com instead of the FIA
  • Reference 43 has no work or publisher.
  Done Eagleash (talk) 12:10, 31 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

That's all I have. On hold until the issues have been rectified. Z105space (talk) 07:19, 31 January 2016 (UTC)Reply

I have done the rest, I believe. Thank you so much for your work, Eagleash! Zwerg Nase (talk) 08:57, 2 February 2016 (UTC)Reply
All the points raised have been rectified. I hereby award this article GA status. Good work!  . Z105space (talk) 09:20, 2 February 2016 (UTC)Reply
Thank you! :) Zwerg Nase (talk) 09:40, 2 February 2016 (UTC)Reply