Talk:2015 Italian Grand Prix/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Z105space (talk · contribs) 16:51, 15 December 2015 (UTC)

I shall review this article. Comments will appear soon. Z105space (talk) 16:51, 15 December 2015 (UTC)

Lead

• "after it was discovered one of the rear tyres of his Mercedes" - rewrite to "after it was discovered his left-rear tyre on his Mercedes"

 Done with slight adjustments

• Wikilink Pirelli in the third paragraph

 Done

Background

• As with other F1 race reports at GA level, the championship standings heading into the race should be included.

 Done

• Explain who Bernie Ecclestone is to the non-racing expert.

 Done

Free practice

• "three practice sessions were held; there were two 1.5-hour sessions on Friday and another one-hour session before qualifying on Saturday." It would better read if 1.5-hour was replaced by 90-minute

 Done

• Italicise The Guardian as it is a newspaper publication.

 Done

• "Nico Rosberg, for whom it was the first race after the birth of his first child," I believe the mention of Rosberg's first race after the birth of his child is irrelevant to the article.

 Done

• "Force India's" - Force India cars

 Done

• "but he was able to continue after losing his car at the Ascari chicane." - the words "control" and "of" need to be added inbetween the words "losing" and "his"

 Done

• Wikilink red flag to Racing flags#Red flag as the non-racing expert will not understand what it is

 Done

Qualifying

• "penalized" - Re-word to penalised as F1 race reports should be written in British English

 Done

• "is engine cover blown of at Curva Grande" There is a typo here as "of" should be spelt as "off"

 Done

• "littering the track with debris," replace the word "littering" with "scattering"

 Done

• "both Manor Marussias and both McLarens were eliminated." I feel this sentence should be written as "both Manor Marussia and McLaren cars were eliminated."

 Done with "drivers" instead of "cars"

Race

• De-link Marcus Ericcsson as he is already linked in the qualifying sub-section

 Done Removed all repeat links (4 in total)

• "which allowed the Mercedes to move in to less than three seconds behind the Ferrari." - Do you mean Rosberg moved within three seconds behind Vettel? Is so re-word the sentence as the wording is potentially confusing.

 Done

Post-race

• "Red Bull's team principal" - Remove the "'s" in "Red Bull's".

 Done

• "At the podium interview, conducted by director George Lucas," - the word "film" should be added after the word "director" for clarification.

 Done

References

• The publisher for References 2 & 18 should be JHED Media BV just like in Reference 3

 Done

• Reference 6 is dead. Is there any possibility of finding an archive link through the Internet Archive?

 Done Replaced with better source + archived link

• References 48, 49, 53 & 54 should say work is Formula1.com and not FIA

 Done

That is all I have. I will place his review on hold for seven days. Z105space (talk) 09:13, 19 December 2015 (UTC)

@Z105space: Hey! Thank you so much again for a thorough review. I am very busy up until christmas, so if you could give me 1-2 days more over the holidays, that would be great :) Zwerg Nase (talk) 18:59, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

@Zwerg Nase: No worries. I will extend the deadline to 14 days. :) Z105space (talk) 19:03, 21 December 2015 (UTC)

@Z105space: Hey! As you can see, I got quite a lot done, but with having visitors the last couple of days and heading to a seminar tonight, I might need until next weekend to finish the last points of the review. I hope that is OK? Zwerg Nase (talk) 08:53, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

@Zwerg Nase:Yes that is absolutely fine. Z105space (talk) 11:48, 4 January 2016 (UTC)

@Z105space: I believe it is now all done. Sorry this took so long! Zwerg Nase (talk) 13:38, 14 January 2016 (UTC)

@Zwerg Nase: It is indeed all done. Promoting to GA class. Z105space (talk) 13:46, 14 January 2016 (UTC)