Talk:2011–12 Sheffield United F.C. season/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by QatarStarsLeague in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: QatarStarsLeague (talk · contribs) 04:40, 7 November 2012 (UTC) Phew, this is a lengthy one! I will do my best to surmount this one however, as I am passionate about soccer and I would like to do something ambitious, albeit audacious, for my second-ever review. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 04:40, 7 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

The Review edit

As with my other review we will be doing this in a serialized format, starting with the lead...

Lead edit

As you will notice I had to make some minor edits to the lead, mostly for prose purposes. As far as everything else is concerned, the lead is fine. It appears as if every nugget of information corroborates with the body of the article, so we will move on.

Infobox edit

The only edit I will ask you to make, although it will not be required, is that you provide references for the tripartite mentions of attendance, highest, lowest, and average.

Done. Bladeboy1889 (talk)

Team kit edit

Just this one edit:
Due to the mention of the team's nickname or colloquial name in this section, I will ask that you provide mention of the nickname in the infobox as well, as some readers may be confused as to whether the "Blades" are Sheffield United or Sheffield Wednesday.

There's no field for nicknames in the season infobox - I've added it to the intro instead.Bladeboy1889 (talk)

Season Overview edit

The rest of the review will commence after these initial issues have been rectified. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 16:11, 7 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Pre-Season edit

This section looks good, cleaned up a few issues.

August-September edit

I believe I have fixed one minor peccancy with the caption, other than that everything is great. Images check out fine.

October-November edit

This section good, I don"t believe I needed to fix anything here. The reference to Gary Speed some say is irrelevant, but he was so influential, so it would be egregiously inconsiderate to pass without that reference.

December-January edit

Had to fix a very minor couple of grammatical errors, but everything else good. Again, images are good.

Febuarary-March edit

Everything is good after I placed some commas.

April-May edit

Needed just one grammatical change here. Very good.

Another trip to Wembley (!) edit

All I would like is a reference for the blistering heat comment. It is not required but would be preferred.

I was there and it was unbearably hot! :( - I've added another match report as a supporting reference which mentions the temperature. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 09:13, 18 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Reserves (!) edit

"Sheffield United Reserves played in the Central League: Central Division at the Coach and Horses ground, which is also Sheffield F.C.'s home ground." Ref need here.
Other than that, all good here.

It was meant to be covered by the round up article ref but I forgot to add it in for that section, done that now and expanded it a bit as well for further clarity. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 09:02, 18 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Academy edit

This section is good.

Squad edit

I will leave off here, to restart the review tomorrow. Just one or two outstanding issues at this moment, so great job. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 04:40, 12 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Squad (roster itself) edit

I believe that protocol for football squads go as such the squad listing itself doesn't need a reference. So this section will pass (phew).

Out on loan edit

This section is good.

Players leaving before season end (!) edit

I believe that the title of this section should be in past-tense, as opposed to present-tense. I will still pass the article even if this change isn't made, so it is entirely augmentable to your discretion.

Changed. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 08:51, 18 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Starting 11 edit

All good here.

Transfers edit

This set includes the subsets of transfers in, out, and contract extensions. Everything is fine for this section.

League Table (!) edit

Forgive me, but is this the season's last, finite table. If so, then everything is good. If not, then you will need to edit the table so it is reflexive of the latest league standings.

Added clarification note. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 08:54, 18 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

Season firsts edit

Very glad to see references for all of the individual information slots here. Nice work.

Squad staistics edit

The one reference you provided does serve as an umbrella, encompassing every singular entry within the section. On those grounds, this section passes.

Matches edit

I am ecstatic and enthralled to see reports for every single match played by the blades. Bravo. This section certainly passes.

Honors and awards edit

This section is good, as references are provided for everything.

Post-review, concluding critique edit

This really is a mammoth article, and it took an exhaustive amount of work to review it. Although I can say with entire disambiguity that this article is ready to pass, a couple of issues remain. Once they are addressed, I will pass the article. Very good work on this article, and congratulations. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 01:07, 13 November 2012 (UTC)Reply

  • Just as a convenience, an exclamation point is added to every section in which you need to address a matter. QatarStarsLeague (talk) 05:08, 13 November 2012 (UTC)Reply
I'll have a look at the remaining points over the weekend. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 09:31, 16 November 2012 (UTC)Reply
Sounds good! QatarStarsLeague (talk) 20:49, 17 November 2012 (UTC)Reply
All done hopefully. Thanks for taking the time to review. Bladeboy1889 (talk) 09:14, 18 November 2012 (UTC)Reply