Talk:2009 Women's Cricket World Cup final/GA1
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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk · contribs) 20:10, 6 June 2012 (UTC)
Another good one. No real problems, and I'm nit-picking a little. My only concern (and I'm not the best one to address this) is how accessible this would be to the non-cricketer. But this is GA, not FAC and I don't see this as a problem here at all. But it may be worth bearing in mind if you take it further. However, I think a few more links would help.
- Do we really need to make the point about Australia (traditional rivals, main adversary) twice?
- "Patient half-century" is slightly POV; slow or cautious may be better.
- "helped to restrict the run chase": Not sure you can restrict a run-chase. A total, yes, but not a chase. Maybe "slowed the run chase"? And should run chase be hyphenated?
- Changed to "slowed the run chase." The Daily Telegraph and ESPNcricinfo both use it without hyphens, so I'll stick with that. Harrias talk 21:07, 6 June 2012 (UTC)
- "South Africa fell apart in their chase": a little too journalistic?
- "led by a century": A hint of sports-speak again.
- "New Zealand set a record second wicket parternership in their final match": A record for who, and in what competition? All ODIs or just WC matches?
- "Shelley Nitschke strangled the run scoring": And again, journalese.
- "New Zealand collapsed to 101 for 7, during which middle-order batsmen Sara McGlashan and Aimee Mason both got starts": Not sure it sounds quite right, getting starts during a collapse.
- "despite not hitting the ball.[25] Despite their struggles": Despite… despite
- Unless I've missed it, the only mention of Shaw as MoM is in the lead.
- Maybe some more links: partnership, fours, sixes, mid-on, seam, spin
- Images, links and dablinks all check out fine. Spot-checks reveal no problems.
As usual, a few minor copy-edits, but feel free to revert. I'll put this on hold for the moment, but it's another easy pass. Good stuff. Sarastro1 (talk) 20:31, 6 June 2012 (UTC)