Talk:2/4th Machine Gun Battalion (Australia)/GA1

Latest comment: 8 years ago by Anotherclown in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Anotherclown (talk · contribs) 01:13, 27 February 2016 (UTC)Reply


Progression

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  • Version of the article when originally reviewed: [1]
  • Version of the article when review was closed: [2]

Technical review

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  • Citations:: the citation check tool reveals no errors (no action required)
  • Disambiguations: no dabs - [3] (no action req'd)
  • Linkrot: Ext links all work - [4] (no action req'd)
  • Alt text: Some of the images lack alt text, so you might consider adding it for consistency (although its not a GA requirement) - [5] (no action required)
  • Copyright violations: The Earwig Tool reveals no issues with copyright violations or close paraphrasing [6] (no action req'd).
  • Duplicate links: one duplicate link to be removed:

Criteria

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  • It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS):  
    • "... seeing action in the disastrous fall of Singapore and on Java...", perhaps note that they arrived as reinforcements late in the campaign?
    • "... there was an influx in volunteers for the 2nd AIF...", perhaps consider "... there was an influx of volunteers for the 2nd AIF..."
    • "...the decision was made to only recruit personnel for the 2/4th only from the west..." → "...the decision was made to recruit personnel for the 2/4th only from the west..."
    • "...was on individual training rather than collective..." → "...was on individual rather than collective training..."
    • repetitive prose here: "..initially his requests had been rejected initially..." (initially x 2)
    • "...the battalion received orders to move north to Darwin..." You link Darwin here but it was mentioned earlier so the link should be moved per the MOS.
    • Wikilink SS Westralia (1897)
    • repetitive prose here: "...departure was advanced and so they departed..." (departed and departure)
    • "...concentrated their landing in the Australian 8th Division’s area of responsibility..." (perhaps note that it was understrength with only two brigades available and allocated a very wide frontage?)
    • Is the comma correct here: "...taking their wounded, with them..."?
    • Also I question the comma placement here: "... facing a narrow, peninsula between..."
    • Some inconsistency b/n "machine-gun" and "machine gun" (hyphen vs no hyphen)
    • Typo here I think: "Causeway before the it was finally..."
    • "in Singapore were initially concentrated in Changi prison, in Singapore..." this seems a little redundant to mention Singapore twice.
  • It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (references):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
    • No issues.
  • It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
    • All major aspects appear to have been covered.
    • Article is focused and doesn't go into unnecessary detail.
  • It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    a (fair representation):   b (all significant views):  
    • No issues.
  • It is stable.
    No edit wars etc.:  
    • No issues.
  • It contains images, where possible, to illustrate the topic.
    a (tagged and captioned):   b (Is illustrated with appropriate images):   c (non-free images have fair use rationales):   d public domain pictures appropriately demonstrate why they are public domain':  
    • Images are appropriate for article and are PD and have the req'd documentation.
    • Does File:Sarimbun battle.jpg need a PD US tag?
    • Captions look fine.