Talk:1997 New Mexico's 3rd congressional district special election/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 21:18, 11 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• Add a short description
  • Added to the second paragraph.
• Are free images for Serna or Miller available?
  • Unfortunately, no. I've looked honestly everywhere for them. There's a solid number of non-free images that are available, but because both people are still alive, I don't think that fair use would apply here.
• I find it extremely odd that the election date is never explicitly mentioned in the body, just in the lead.
  • I added it to the body (and also changed the reference here-- the original said it was "likely" he would select that date, added the news bulletin where he set it).
• "and the negative perception of Eric Serna as a Democratic candidate" - I don't like this phrasing. It can be read as Serna had a negative perception because he was a Democrat, which doesn't seem to be right, as this was a blue district.
  • Fixed.
• The lead doesn't provide a good summary of the article. The candidate selection process and the campaign drama aren't really mentioned at all in the lead
  • Added it in here, hopefully should be enough.

Background

• "Democratic Congressman Bill Richardson had held New Mexico's 3rd congressional district since it was created from the 1980 census" - Link 1980 United States Census. Also, from isn't really the best word. Maybe clarify that it was from redistricting?
  • I added a lot here to it, think it clarifies it now.
• Per MOS:PERCENT, you need to spell out percent, not use the %.
  • Changed.
• "The heavily Democratic-3rd district held a large" - Feels like a weird hyphen to me.
  • Removed.
• Link the Democrats and Republicans. Non-US readers may not be familiar with the US part system.
  • Linked to them.
• Link Lieutenant Governor of New Mexico
  • Linked to it.
• Link Roberto Mondragón at the first mention, not at the later one
  • Fixed it.
• "At the state level, the Green Party of New Mexico had run a strong third party campaign in the 1994 New Mexico gubernatorial election, where Lieutenant Governor Roberto Mondragón claimed 10% of the vote statewide, and were growing in strength in New Mexico at the time of the special election" - Remove "At the state level", as this is clear, since you're talking only about the Green Party of New Mexico, not the overall Green Party. Also, since Green Party of New Mexico is a singular organization, use "was", not "were"
  • Fixed.
• "New Mexico's state law required the Governor of New Mexico to call for a special election within 10 days of a vacancy in the Congressional delegation." - Not in the source. Confusingly, even though the source appears to be paywalled, I was able to get into this one, but not the others.
  • I wrote this article while I was waiting for approval for a newspapers.com account from the Wikipedia Library and I don't plan on making the same mistake again if I can avoid it, it's even tough for me to login to see these sometimes. Can't speak for the paywall part, but the source is referring to just the second sentence here (which has the direct quote), and not the first one. I've added another source for the first sentence here. Also, if you'd like access to the library I'm using, feel free to message me off of here and I can send over temporary credentials.
• Green Party of New Mexico is overlinked
  • Done
• You need to gloss that GOP = Republicans
  • Done
• Link The Santa Fe New Mexican
  • Done.

• Still responding to these, will add more soon. Nomader (talk) 17:35, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

Democratic selection process

• "Santa Fe County Commissioner Javier Gonzales, dropped out" - Lose the comma.
  • Done.
• In the candidates list, mark Maes as dropped out, like you did with the other ones who did so
  • Marked it the same way.
• "Senator Roman Maes announced that he was considering a general election write-in campaign due to disgust with the selection process.[27] Maes eventually decided to drop out altogether instead" - You've already introduced Maes, so you don't need to do that again. In fact, you can probably combine these two sentences
  • Combined them.
• The main paragraph implies that Sosa Jr. thought about running, but didn't, but the list calls him a candidate, implying he did run.
  • It's honestly a bit confusing-- as far as I can tell from sources, he never officially said "I'm running", but the chairman said people could vote for him, he ended up giving a speech at the committee hearing complaining about early endorsements of Serna, and got 8 votes at the meeting. There's no "Sosa is now running" article I can find anywhere outside the kind of weirdness of him hopping onto the stage here.
• Per MOS:JR, not comma before the Jr. in the names.
  • Fixed.
• We need a citation that Lobato was a candidate.
  • Added a citation.

More to come. Hog Farm _Bacon 16:02, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Republican selection process

• What denomination was Redmond a pastor in?
  • Added a source for it-- his denomination is the Christian Church denomination, which I've wikilinked to in the title of his church.
• Redmond is overlinked
  • Removed extras.
• If Redmond got 70 votes, Carrarro got 33, then who got the other 31?
  • Helpfully, the source doesn't say-- it only specifies for those two candidates.

Green Part nomination

• "Santa Fean city councilman Cris Moore immediately expressed interest in the nomination" - It's not necessary to try to turn Santa Fe into an adjective here, so just use the regular spelling of Fe.
  • Although I think it'd be a boon to the English language, I've made this change.
• The results subheading of this section isn't really long enough to support itself, so just merge it into the rest of the section.
  • Merged it in.

• Will be getting to the general election shortly. Nomader (talk) 17:59, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

General election

• "Before Serna had even secured the nomination, GOP Chairman John Dendahl attacked Eric Serna on ethics-related grounds and for the Democratic nomination process, which was attracting controversy." - The reader already knows who Serna is. We don't need his first name again.
  • Removed the first name.
• "with Redmond's support of the Christian Coalition and Redmond fought back, saying that his values matched those of the district" - This needs rephrased. As it is right now, it's not grammatical, but I'm not sure exactly what's wrong.
  • I just deleted it, I'm really not sure what I was trying to say there-- the next sentence is from the exact same source. I think it's leftover from my original jotted down notes.
• I believe it's "northern New Mexico", not "Northern New Mexico", as the direction adjective is only capitalized if there's a specific formal name of the region
  • It's a semi-formal (at least) name for the region-- "Northern New Mexico" and other places I've seen it referred to in news print all have it capitalized. Added a wikilink here.
• Link Roman Catholic Archdiocese of Santa Fe
  • Done.
• "At a forum in Taos that was aired on cable television, Miller, Serna, Redmond, and Pearlman (the Reform candidate) participated" - We already know that Pearlman is the reform candidate, so the paranthetical isn't necessary
  • Fixed.
• ""I don't even like sushi and I wouldn't be drinking a beer in a bar like that. I like American beer, Corona, really," - I can't access the source for this, but I want to double-check to see if this is right, cause I'm pretty sure Corona ain't an American beer
  • I've temporarily hosted a PDF of the article on Google Drive so you can review this quote in all it's absolute (possibly sarcastic?) beauty. Linked here, once this review is finished I'll be taking it down.
• "Radio attack ads included Republican ads against Serna, saying: "Washington is engulfed in money scandals and corruption.[51] Eric Serna would fit right in"" - Remove the inline in the middle of the quote. It's not necessary, it really looks odd.
  • Done.
• "supported balancing the federal budget within five years, but only Richmond supported a Constitutional Amendment to codify it" - Who's Richmond?
  • That's a very, very unfortunate typo. Fixed.

Ready for the home stretch section, gonna take another break there. Hog Farm _Bacon 18:56, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

• • Coming up on the last section here as well. Nomader (talk) 18:18, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

• FEC needs glossed at the first mention, which is well up in the article.
  • Done.
• Link The Albuquerque Tribune and Albuquerque Journal
  • Done.
• Gloss DNC
  • Done.

References

• All of the newsbank references need the subscription required parameter
  • Should be fixed now.
• The Magleby reference has two issues: Only include his name, not the distinguished professor thing. Also, it needs a page number.
  • Fixed (also removed the duplicate author piece).

That's about it from me, I think. Placing on hold. Hog Farm _Bacon 22:23, 12 October 2020 (UTC)

Been a week with no contact from nominator, who isn't really active at the moment, so gonna fail this one. Nominator - use these to improve the article; ping me once these get done and I can try to take another look. Hog Farm _Bacon 17:14, 19 October 2020 (UTC)

• I'm 9 months late, but I've gone through and addressed your comments. Thank you so much for this thorough review, it means the world to me that you took this much time to read through it. Nomader (talk) 18:33, 6 July 2021 (UTC)