Talk:1991 Pacific hurricane season/GA1

GA Review

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This is an informal beginning to the GA review...more will come later. The lead needs work. The sentences don't seem to flow in any natural order. I'd place the line about the bounds of the hurricane season towards the top. One sentence in there has severe grammar issues. Every system appears well-referenced; I'll check later to see if all the ref links work. I'd throw the timeline into the section concerning the season summary, which makes better sense and would better fit our other hurricane season GA's. Hilda's section has one very long paragraph followed by a stray sentence. I don't mind breaking it into two paragraphs, but they should be more even. Thegreatdr (talk) 15:53, 7 March 2009 (UTC)

I changed the paragraph splitting in the Hilda section so as to make the first paragraph shorter and the second one longer. The second paragraph now covers Hilda's dissipation and impact. I moved the timeline. I rewrote the lead to fix the ingrammatical sentence and make it flow better, covering impacting storms first, other notables second. Miss Madeline | Talk to Madeline 01:49, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

Good work so far. It might be better to move the timeline to either the beginning or ending of the season summary section...it looks awkward for it to break up the section into pieces. Within the season summary, the passage "This low level of activity was attributed to unusual circulation patterns aloft over the tropical Pacific" is unclear. What was unusual? The season summary has issues. In one occasion, "last year" is used to describe 1990, rather than 2008, which is confusing. In the passage about the first November storm since the "last quarter century," what does this mean? The first since 1966 or 1974/1975 (the third quarter of the 20th century)? An actual year would be more useful in both the "last year" and "quarter century" cases. Reference 28 is broken. I'd reword "wave with large amplitude" to significant tropical wave. There is at least one occurrence of wave all by itself...it needs to be changed to tropical wave. Add convert templates to convert central pressure in mb/hPa to inches of mercury per the changes I've made to the first few storms. More wikilinks are needed, particularly to the first occurrence of eye, maximum sustained wind, and rainfall (to either rain or precipitation). There are a couple lines that require simple rewording to become more understandable, merely from a grammar standpoint. Thegreatdr (talk) 02:57, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

I have rephrased vague times to indicate specific years. I added missing convert templates to central pressures. I added a few more wikilinks and rewrote awkward sentences. Are there any specific sentences that are still difficult to understand? Miss Madeline | Talk to Madeline 04:04, 8 March 2009 (UTC)

I made the remaining fixes and passed the article. Congratulations! Thegreatdr (talk) 13:59, 8 March 2009 (UTC)