Talk:1989 Progressive Conservative Party of New Brunswick leadership election/GA1
Latest comment: 1 day ago by B3251 in topic GA Review
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Nominator: B3251 (talk · contribs) 23:06, 5 June 2024 (UTC)
Reviewer: PCN02WPS (talk · contribs) 22:01, 28 June 2024 (UTC)
I'll review this. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 22:01, 28 June 2024 (UTC)
Lead and infobox
- "had been interim led by" → I have never heard the construction "interim led" before; perhaps it is common and I just haven't read it before. It does sound a little unnatural to me - I think that the slightly wordier but clearer "had been held in an interim capacity by..." would be better (note also the position was held, not led)
- surrounded in a string" → "by a string"
- "leading to the party losing all of its seats" → "leading to the party's loss of all of its seats..."
- "The front-running candidate for the leadership election" → "The front-runner for the leadership election..."
- "lead a Conservative party" → since you're not talking about the Conservative Party, but rather parties that are ideologically conservative, you can take the caps off of "Conservative"
Background
- "and the following scandals that would ensue" → "and the following scandals that ensued"
- "in his 1987 re-election to the" → I know what you're trying to say, but it wasn't his re-election if he wasn't re-elected
Leadership election
- "who had previously served as the Minister of Agriculture" → "who had previously been the Minister of Agriculture" to simplify wording
- "doing so around mid-August" → if this means that she indeed declared her candidacy in mid-August, I would break the sentence after "month" and begin "She did so in mid-August" or something similar.
- "later that year" is redundant since we're talking about the specific months (Aug/Nov)
- "included Saint John Mayor Elsie Wayne" → lowercase "mayor"
- "though none of them would end up running" → "though none of them ended up running" or "though none of them ultimately ran" to simplify wording
- "against Myers, the only other candidate" → this bit can be deleted entirely since they are named as the only two candidates in the sentence before
- "previous president of the party" → what is the difference between party presidents and party leaders?
- "financial and personal support."" → move full stop outside quotes per MOS:LQ
- "become leader of a Conservative party" → lowercase "Conservative" as in lead
Aftermath
- Two instances of LQ that need to be fixed
- "Baird ended up resigning" → "Baird resigned"
That's what I've got, nice work. PCN02WPS (talk | contribs) 22:13, 28 June 2024 (UTC)
- Hello again @PCN02WPS, thanks for the review! Regarding your question about the difference between party presidents and leaders, the president is the head of the party's internal/administrative work. The leader, on the other hand, is the politician who leads the party in elections and serves as the premier of the province if their party secures a majority of seats in the legislature from an election. Feel free to let me know if it's alright leaving that unchanged. Otherwise, all concerns have been addressed. B3251(talk) 04:59, 29 June 2024 (UTC)