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Reviewer: Theleekycauldron (talk · contribs) 08:11, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
Hi there! I'll be taking this up :) I can't offer a firm timeline as to when to expect comments, so feel free to request a new reviewer at any time. theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 08:11, 24 September 2023 (UTC)
Prose
editDemocrat Otto Kerner Jr..
one period only, unfortunately :)- I would restructure the first paragraph of Background to focus on the redistricting requirement first and the partisan split that made it impossible second.
Illinois Supreme Court
→the Supreme Court of Illinois
Democrats nominated Adlai Stevenson III, the son of Adlai Stevenson II, a popular former governor in the state, and John A. Kennedy, a businessman who had a similar name but no relation to president John F. Kennedy, who had been murdered the previous year.
awko tacoGiven the unique electoral system allowing voters to vote for candidates of both parties, some newspapers made bipartisan endorsements of candidates.
can't really assign reason based on primary sources, but maybe this works in table format?- duplink to redir Illinois Supreme Court
significant shake-up the balance of power
missed a word there- Is the State Senate redistricting question relevant?
- Probably still specify Illinois Secretary of State
- Possibly extend the list of ten commissioners into two-columns of bullet points?
However, the Supreme Court rejected this argument, stating that an at-large election would only have been required if the legislature had failed to redistrict the Senate in 1956
liiittle too closely paraphrased
Sourcing
edit- It'd probably be better to rework the text to not have to rely on Chamberlain as a source.
- I've replaced it for the sentence where it's the only source. As for the other two places it's cited, the first is to give someone a reference to the relevant part of the constitution (as a useful primary source), and the second is to determine the incumbency status of candidates. I don't see either use as problematic. Elli (talk | contribs) 17:41, 18 November 2023 (UTC)
did not appoint former governor Stratton, the architect of this redistricting process
I'd probably call that OR given the source.Two lawsuits were decided by the Supreme Court on January 4, 1964
don't see in source- Page numbers on Green 1987?
Breadth questions
edit- Why did Kerner deem the legislature's proposed maps unfair?
- Who was on the special commission? What did they try?
- How did the case get to the Supreme Court of Illinois?
- Who chooses/is the tie-breaker under the new rules for the redistricting commission?
- Probably worth mentioning that the Democrats on the commission went down to 22 by the end?
- More rigorous endorsements section? Not sure how this'd go...
Overall
edit@Elli: Fantastic job on the expansion! Prose and breadth look great; I'm going to make some sourcing spot-checks and hopefully I can get this done today. theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 20:44, 13 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Elli: Awesome, thank you so much :) Elli (talk | contribs) 23:58, 13 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Elli: you won't believe this, but that's... all from me? I've made a bunch of fixes in-article and left some other stuff here. Once it's straightened out, you're good to go :) theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 06:49, 18 November 2023 (UTC)
- Great :) I'll work on addressing your remaining feedback today. Elli (talk | contribs) 17:23, 18 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Theleekycauldron: can you take a look now? I've addressed almost everything here. As for the things that I haven't: I don't have much of an opinion on whether the members of the commission should be in prose or as a list, but I don't know how best to present them as a list, so I've left them as prose. Also not sure what a more rigorous endorsements section would look like as listing them like we do on most election pages would be a huge mess. Elli (talk | contribs) 23:10, 28 November 2023 (UTC)
- and we are... done! very nice job :) theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 05:33, 30 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Theleekycauldron: can you take a look now? I've addressed almost everything here. As for the things that I haven't: I don't have much of an opinion on whether the members of the commission should be in prose or as a list, but I don't know how best to present them as a list, so I've left them as prose. Also not sure what a more rigorous endorsements section would look like as listing them like we do on most election pages would be a huge mess. Elli (talk | contribs) 23:10, 28 November 2023 (UTC)
- Great :) I'll work on addressing your remaining feedback today. Elli (talk | contribs) 17:23, 18 November 2023 (UTC)
- @Elli: you won't believe this, but that's... all from me? I've made a bunch of fixes in-article and left some other stuff here. Once it's straightened out, you're good to go :) theleekycauldron (talk • she/her) 06:49, 18 November 2023 (UTC)