Talk:1877 U.S. Patent Office fire/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Doug Coldwell in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 16:57, 18 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

Criteria edit

1. Prose   On hold

2. Verifiability   On hold

3. Depth of Coverage  Pass

4. Neutral  Pass

5. Stable  Pass

6. Illustrations  Pass

7. Miscellaneous   On hold

Comments edit

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  • "The building was finished being constructed in 1864." - Consider "Construction of the building was finished in 1864"
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 08:50, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "and some valiant firemen. [6]" - Remove the extraneous space after the period
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 08:52, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Link patent models at the first point where you discuss models in the prose
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 08:59, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "nineteenth century" - hyphenate
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 08:59, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • "The patent office could loan out the rejected models to museums and other organizations, the increase in litigation made their preservation important and militated against such transfers." - This sentence is confusing me. Can it be rephrased? Also, I think Patent Office should be capitalized at all points when you're referring to the bureau
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:04, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

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  • Does Campbell have an OCLC?
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:14, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply
  • Ref 8 the date should be October 26, 1877, not June 2006. I'd recommend setting it up as a cite journal or cite periodical, with the journal/periodical name being The Engineer. Also, I don't think the comma in "Superintendent, of Models" is needed.
  Done --Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:37, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

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  • Add a short description. If you're unfamiliar with doing this, I can add one.
  Done - Not familiar with this. Yes, could you please add one. Thank you!--Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:37, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

That's it for the first pass, I'll give this one another look through later. Hog Farm (talk) 22:18, 18 June 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Hog Farm: All issues have been addressed. Could you take another look. Thanks.--Doug Coldwell (talk) 10:37, 19 June 2020 (UTC)Reply