Talk:(sic)nesses/GA1

Latest comment: 13 years ago by CrowzRSA in topic GA Review

GA Review

edit

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 2 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

  • "The double-disc release features a recording of their headlining performance at the 2009 Download Festival along with a 45-minute behind the scenes documentary created by percussionist Shawn Crahan, and the four music videos from All Hope Is Gone." - comma after Festival, and link music video
  • "and it included free giveaways" - not mentioned later
  • If you are going to mention individual reviews in the lead I think you should cite them here.
  • Why? they're not quotations, and quotes are generally the only things required to have references in the lead.
  • Expand the lead to include charts
  • Release date and genres are in infobox, but not in body
  • There have been SEVERAL discussions on whether putting genres like nu metal and alternative metal and it always comes down to weather or not sources list them as that genre, and allmusic refers to most of the songs (both live and studio) to be either nu metal or alternative metal, and the whole (sic)nesses page ([1]) lists it as heavy metal.
  • Not good to start the body with "It"
  • Comma after "Shawn Crahan stated that"
  • Indicate that Gray was a member of the band
  • "Shawn Crahan attended the New York event" - don't need his first name again
  • Album title in Crahan's quote should be italicised
  • "The DVD was released on September 28, 2010 sold 9,300 copies" - missing word
  • Link and italicse Billboard
  • Why are other charts not mentioned in prose?
  • As is, there really isn't enough information on the entry date and entry position and stuff, so the prose would be very bland… I think in the future the sites will update it to include that stuff, but that may be way off. CrowzRSA 21:16, 4 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • Would the music videos not start at chapter 19?
  • The DVD doesn't list them as 19-22. I figured that it was intended that they were separate track listings, and that they deserved separate number listings… CrowzRSA 02:00, 3 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
  • How about "legal names" instead of "real names"?
  • Is there a reason that the band members are in descending order? Ascending would seem more logical.
  • Italicise album title whenever it occurs
  • The Charts and certifications table is a bit confusing, as it kinda implies that the Top Music Video Chart is responsible for the certification, when Billboard do not have anything to do with certs

On hold now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 2 March 2011 (UTC)Reply

I am satisfied with improvements. Passing now. Adabow (talk · contribs) 22:48, 4 March 2011 (UTC)Reply
Thanks, CrowzRSA 16:13, 6 March 2011 (UTC)Reply