Draft talk:Tricho-Dento-Osseous Syndrome

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Sweiner02

Geri, I really liked your pictures and diagrams. They were very relevant and eye catching. Bravo on finding some winners. Are they cited properly though? I also thought you interpreted the scientific information very well. The technical terms were very clearly explained. This is an interesting article and I think it will be a great addition to wikipedia. I am not sure if you need all of those bolded abbreviations though, you might want to check with that.

Great job, Conor — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cheffer2 (talkcontribs) 22:10, 8 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

Geri, Great intro! I think you have a typo here "The teeth can also appear normal in color, but be extremely thing and fragile in their appearance." I like how you have linked the buzz words to other articles. Great job at trying to break down the jargon into layman's terms; like the pictures as well. Typo here "Endodontic procedures are routinely recommended due to treatdental pulp exposure or periodontal abscess. " Overall a great read and easy to understand.

Good luck, April Hannafel2 (talk) 06:22, 8 April 2014 (UTC)Reply


Hey girl!!

Ok it looks thorough, maybe you can have some subtitles under your main headers to separate the section. Because it seemed like a book kind of lol. Other than that good pictures and stuff, just make sure to look back at the rubric for the small details. Emccre2 (talk) 01:54, 7 April 2014 (UTC)Reply

Geri, this is a spectacular page and the time you put into it really shows! I especially like the pictures you have provided for every user. Also, abstract is nicely done, and really does a great job of summarizing everything. There could probably be some more information on recent research, but I do know this is a rough draft so not all of the information has been presented. Under diagnosis, I see that you stated that your disease can be mistaken for Amelogenesis imperfecta, which is important to state. There was a typo after that word, should it be "of the"? Other than that, great jb and good luck moving forward!

Hyogina23 (talk) 04:02, 7 April 2014 (UTC) Harin YoginaReply

  • Good use of links to other wikipedia pages
  • Look at other wikipedia pages and use cite tool for proper references section
  • Introduction is very clear and approachable
  • Make sure to explain or avoid jargon in symptoms section
  • This is looking really great. Obviously you haven't really done the recent research section yet, but most of what you have done looks fairly thorough and well organized.

Sweiner02 (talk) 22:29, 8 April 2014 (UTC)Reply