Draft talk:Ewer of Saint-Maurice d'Agaune
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editI would suggest you link reliquary to its Wikipedia article. For the origin you might want to expand on the evidence for each the theories of its origins. At the very least, show the evidence on why it is of Carolingian. Also I would add Wikipedia links for Oriental, Islamic, and Carolingian.Numouno (talk) 10:38, 28 November 2018 (UTC)
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editYou have a good baseline for the article, but I would include more in depth information regarding your subject, as well as wiki links with some of the places you mentioned. Your sources seem well trusted, but I would look for more to gather from. Getting more sources will definitely help bulk up the content a bit. Regardless, it's a decent work in progress! Keep it up! Rhiannon38 (talk) 04:05, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
The overall organization looks sensible for your draft, so here are a few tips to consider as you revise:
- the target length is 300-500 words for the text body and I don't think you're quite there yet. That said you have two high-quality sources that no doubt have more info than you've currently shared, and it's better if you can expand beyond just those two anyway.
- in particular, maybe add info on what motifs are depicted on it as well as other interesting tidbits about the piece
- a boring mechanical detail is to avoid it's versus its confusion: https://en.oxforddictionaries.com/usage/its-or-it-s
- in the discussion of its origins, "Oriental" is very general and isn't really used anymore as stylistic category in art history--maybe leave it out or give a more precise term? Also, since that source is 75ish years old, it would be interesting to know what more recent scholarship says on the topic.
Please touch base if you have any questions, I'm happy to help! AMcClanan (talk) 19:49, 29 November 2018 (UTC)
Feedback from Prof McClanan, 12/7
editYour entry is clear and informative, thanks for your hard work. It's a shame there is no image for it with clear copyright, but I did take the step of linking to it from another entry (Byzantine enamel) so that it won't be an orphan any longer. AMcClanan (talk) 16:48, 7 December 2018 (UTC)