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I've listed this article for peer review because I believe the article is more or less complete. It is well referenced with reliable sources, although the article still needs a copyedit. I am unsure if the Anime difference section is currently suitable, so haven't yet tagged the for a copyedit. However, I believe that only minor cleanup will be needed, rather then any major grammatical rewrites. The aim is for the article to be submitted as a Good Article Nominee in the near future, depending on any issues raised. However, if you have any suggestions that will be of use for a potential Featured Article attempt at a later date, I am happy to try and accomodate them

Thanks, Dandy Sephy (talk) 19:22, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from NocturneNoir (talk · contribs)
Just some quick comments about your references.

Ref 19 should be retyped out.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Refs 22, 23, and 23 have no publisher, retrieved date, etc. info.

I Will look into replacing these as I have concerns over the use of the sites in question. Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Had to settle for Amazon as I couldn't find any reliable sources elsewhere. Also removed a claim supported by a unreliable reference. Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:11, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 30 can link to Oricon.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Refs 32, 33, 38, 42, 48, 82 have messed up titles because you used ]. Change those to parentheses.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I missed refs 49, 81. ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ^{( t • c )} 01:45, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:11, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

As per the conversation at WT:ANIME, try to avoid the encyclopedic section of Anime News Network. (Refs 41, 45, 47).

I did remove two uses before listing, I obviously didn't look hard enough. I'll take a look at finding alternate sourcing Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You link Amazon.com some times, but not others. (Refs 62, 63, 71, 72)

Unfortunately some things aren't listed at the sites I've used for other references (such as the Kodanclub ones). I saw a FLC where the reviewer said that Amazon should be a last resort if the information isn't available elsewhere. In this case, things that were found off Amazon were used before using Amazon. I'll look into finding other reliable listings Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I think you misunderstood me. If you are going to wikilink for some Amazon references, you need to wikilink for all of them.

ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ^{(t • c)} 01:33, 10 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ah yes, that makes sense. I was very tired at the time :P DoneDandy Sephy (talk) 01:42, 10 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 64 should have 07 instead of 7.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

You have a comment after the Light novels subheading to "change english references to tokyopop's own site". Can you do this?

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 23:25, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Cheers, ɳOCTURNEɳOIR ^{( t • c )} 20:40, 8 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments:

There are multiple references to both "Love Hina Mugendai" and "ラブひな∞" (refs 1, 3, 4, 5, 6, 12, 16); either use one or the other, considering the ISBN is the same for all of these. This also applies to "Love Hina 0"/"ラブひな0" (refs 13, 15, 61, 62, 63).

If you do use the Japanese script for these refs, put them in {{noitalic}}, as Japanese script should never be italicized. Also, add {{noitalic}} to ref 53 (or give the English equivalent).

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 04:32, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Include the ISBN for refs 13, 15, and 61; fix the ISBN for ref 63. I assume the ISBN given for ref 62 is the correct one.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 04:32, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Change "TokyoPop" to "Tokyopop" in refs 7, 8, 10, 11, and 14 to match the use of "Tokyopop" in the lead and in ref 2. Add Tokyopop as the publisher for ref 9.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:33, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Getting away from references... under Love Hina#Anime, "cd" should be capitalized; "Love Hina Xmas Eve ~Silent Night~" and "Love Hina Spring Special ~I Wish Your Dream~" should be unitalicized, and the tildes replaced with a colon before the subtitle ("Title: Subtitle"); there is a stray apostophe before "Love Hina Again" and an instance that should be italicized instead of in double-quotes; decapitalize "Opening"; change the title emphasis for "Kirai Takaramono" and "Be for me, be for you" from italics to double-quotes, and title-case the latter.

DoneDandy Sephy (talk) 04:32, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

"Love Hina Final Selection" should be italicized and not in double-quotes.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:33, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In the last paragraph of Love Hina#Anime, "films comics" and "anime" should not be capitalized.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:33, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

The section heading Love Hina#Video Games needs to be sentence-cased to "Video games".

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:33, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Under aforementioned heading, all the game titles should be italicized instead of in double-quotes. There is also a stray right-bracket in "Love Hina: Totsuzen no Engeji Happening".

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:33, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Under Love Hina#Soundtracks, "Image songs" and "Maxi singles" should be decapped; the listed singles in the first paragraph should be in double-quotes, not italics; in the second paragraph, "Love Hina" and the soundtrack names should be italicized and not in double-quotes; the two vocal collections in the third paragraph should be italicized; the title "ラブひな OKAZAKI COLLECTION" should be replaced with a properly-cased English equivalent; "Love Live Hina" should be in double-quotes and not italics.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 04:32, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

In the first paragraph of Love Hina#Reception, "Anime Product of the Year" should not be italicized.

Done Dandy Sephy (talk) 03:33, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

—tan³ tx 03:16, 9 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Note Just to say that I've been busy with other things, so haven't resolved the ANN encyclopedia refs yet (I have some ideas though). Has anyone got any content issues rather then copyedit related ones? Is the article ready for a GA nomination once the ANN refs are changed? I want to look at adding an image or two for the production section and possibly something else. Aside from that there are no major content updates planned. Dandy Sephy (talk) 05:42, 13 March 2009 (UTC)[reply]