Jane Fonda edit
I think this article has been improved significantly since Jimbo recommended priority cleanup last October. It appears to be NPOV and well sourced, and to cover the most important aspect's of Fonda's life, but I know there is still lots of room for improvement, and I would like some feedback. Andrea Parton 22:54, 1 March 2006 (UTC)
- Needs a bit of restructure, it's very politics biased, and (minor point) consider a bit of factual text under the main photo. Good work tho! --PopUpPirate 00:15, 2 March 2006 (UTC)
- The introduction text is too short. -- Longhair 06:02, 4 March 2006 (UTC)
It looks pretty good, but there are some points that need addressing in addition to the above:
- The awards entries can be linked to the appropriate sub-pages of Academy_Award#Awards, Golden_Globe#Award_categories and Emmy Award. For example, the 1970 Academy Award Nomination can be linked to Academy Award for Best Actress. (The later page actually lists it as a 1969 award nomination, so possibly the award dates also need checking.)
- The references aren't used as inline citations. It's just a listing of references used.
- How come the films by year list doesn't match the films by name list? (There's an empty cell in the right-hand list.)
- The "Romantic relationships" section should just use normal prose, rather than a bulleted list.
- There's a sentence in "Ancestry and family" that begins with an "And": please fix it.
- The "Fun With Dick and Jane" link needs to be fixed--this page exists at Fun with Dick and Jane (1977 film).
Thanks! — RJH 15:53, 6 March 2006 (UTC)