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I've listed this article for peer review because I have to in order for Broken Sword to keep its Good topic status, and I want to promote it to GA after its release.

Thanks, Khanassassin ☪ 21:21, 16 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I'm a little concerned about the two huge quotes in the article, which account for about a fourth of the total text. The overview section is really nothing more than the quote. Maybe that's because there is no other information about the plot? —Torchiest ^talk_edits 07:02, 17 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
- I re-wrote the two quotes. Better now? --Khanassassin ☪ 16:25, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  - Getting there, but this: "they witness a man disquesed as a pizza man murdering another man and stealing a seamlessly worthless painting" doesn't make any sense. —Torchiest ^talk_edits 16:46, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    - How doesn't it make sense? The pizza-man-disquised guy comes in, kills a guy and steals I a painting which "seemes" worthless, but actually isn't. --Khanassassin ☪ 17:20, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
      - Ah. You've misspelled "disguised", and I think the word you want is "seemingly". —Torchiest ^talk_edits 18:18, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]
        Haha! How could I have misspelled seemingly as seamlessly?! Haha. OK, it's done now. :) --Khanassassin ☪ 19:07, 18 November 2012 (UTC)[reply]