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The following is an archived discussion of a featured list nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured list candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The list was promoted by The Rambling Man 17:57, 1 November 2012 [1].

Branch Rickey Award edit

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Nominator(s): – Muboshgu (talk) 18:02, 30 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

My other nomination is close to closing. Can I get one more FL in during the WikiCup? I have until October 31 for this to be promoted to count to my score. – Muboshgu (talk) 18:02, 30 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from Bloom6132 (talk) 21:34, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments –
  • "The award was created...in 1991, and first awarded in 1992" – I'm not too sure about this, but I think there should be a "was" in between "and" & "first".
  • Rewritten as "The award, created by the Rotary Club of Denver in 1991, was first awarded in 1992 at their annual banquet."
  • "nominates one individual who exemplifies" – add "best" in between "who" and "exemplifies".
  • Added
  • "and Shane Victorino[11] worked with children in need" – comma after Victorino.
  • For players in the Hall of Fame, there should be refs to their individual BR bios, since the general Award Winners ref doesn't designate their status.

—Bloom6132 (talk) 19:15, 30 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • B-Ref added for all players (Hemond didn't play). – Muboshgu (talk) 21:28, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support – the list looks good and meets all 6 criteria. —Bloom6132 (talk) 21:34, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Revolved comments from NapHit (talk) 21:01, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments'
  • "The award is named for former player and executive Branch Rickey." The use of for confuses me, is that common in American English? After seems a more appropriate word to me
  • Changed to "in honor of", which I think is the best English wording that could fit here – Muboshgu (talk) 19:46, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Proceeds of the banquet benefit Denver Kids, Inc., a charity that benefits at-risk students who attend Denver Public Schools." This sentence is confusing, i'm not sure if its supposed to be in past or present tense. Not keen on the double use of benefits either
  • Second "benefit" dropped by rewriting to "a charity for at-risk students". I think saying that "proceeds benefit" indicates present tense. – Muboshgu (talk) 19:46, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "and visited with..."
  • "visited and raised money for" – Muboshgu (talk) 19:46, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "while Moyer's foundation had raised..."
  • "Other winners worked with a specific illness, such as Curt Schilling, who worked with amyotrophic lateral sclerosis." I'm not clear on this either. Are who saying he worked with those who had the illness, or that he had it himself?
  • ""Other winners devoted their work to aiding individuals who had a specific illness" – Muboshgu (talk) 19:46, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

NapHit (talk) 14:12, 1 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from TBrandley (talk) 02:13, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • "a" should be "an"
  • That's what I thought. I rewrote the sentence. – Muboshgu (talk) 00:27, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "$6 million" US million, Canadian million, which? Note it.
  • The table is missing scope="row" for the main parameter of the table, for WP:ACCESS
  • Also not seeing which one. I see them all having the scope parameter. Which one is missing? – Muboshgu (talk) 00:11, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • You use scope="col"'s but not scope="row"'s. scope="row"'s in the actual contents of table, and should replace scope="col". Scope col should be used in the main table parameter header stuff. TBrandley 00:19, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • But... I do use scope row for every entry of the player's name in the table. – Muboshgu (talk) 00:27, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Scope row is used there though. TBrandley 00:37, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

TBrandley 00:01, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Resolved comments from The Rambling Man (talk) 09:03, 5 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Comments
  • Infobox image caption doesn't need a full stop.
  • You have "president " in the lead but "Senior Vice President" in the table, i.e. different capitalisation.
  • Decapitalized in the table
  • Don't think you need to link sculpture.
  • Would be better linking the Rotary Club.
  • Four paras seems a little large for an article of this size (per WP:LEAD).
  • I had contemplated merging the paragraphs on the award and the voting earlier. I just did it. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:59, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Consider adding a column for what each winner did to get the award.
  • Hmm. That might be messy, but I'll consider it and test it out in my sandbox, perhaps. – Muboshgu (talk) 16:59, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • I don't think this will work. See Tony Conigliaro Award for an example. As you can see, that column becomes kinda massive and doesn't fit with upright images on the side. – Muboshgu (talk) 21:11, 3 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Charlotte Observer is The Charlotte Observer.
  • However, The Rocky Mountain News is just Rocky Mountain News.

The Rambling Man (talk) 10:21, 2 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]

  • Comment – Don't think the hyphen in "major-league cities" should be there. We usually say the term major league without the hyphen. Giants2008 (Talk) 22:15, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
    • You're right. Not sure how it got there. Hyphen removed. – Muboshgu (talk) 22:32, 7 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • Support Looks good to me...<sarcasm> especially because it's an award that 3 former Phillies have won! </sarcasm> In all seriousness, nice work. Go Phightins! 02:19, 31 October 2012 (UTC)[reply]
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