Wikipedia:Featured article candidates/Fenix*TX

Fenix*TX edit

Self-nom. I consider this the best article I have ever worked on; it's comprehensive, well-structured, referenced and of sufficient length. It has been peer reviewed and an evaluation from WP:FMP is still pending. Despite the fact that the article is about an active band, and that therefore it will likely be extended in the future, it is rather stable. --HarryCane 11:23, 7 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Object. This article was better than I expected, and is well cited and good decisions have been taken about what to include and what not to. The only weakness of this article is that it lacks "brilliant prose". There are many parts of the article that are poorly worded; for example:

Reason for the change of style was Lewis' and DeLaPaz's constant feeling of unhappiness with the band's songs, as revealed by Salazar in an interview in late 2002: "[...] for Lechuza the guys were looking for a different direction so they wrote some songs that were way different, like Something Bad's Gonna Happen and Pasture of Muppets, just so that they could have some songs that they could, in their words, actually have fun playing onstage.

Someone with some time on their hands needs to step in and give the article a thorough copyedit. Other than that, a strong article and I see few other barriers to FA status. Soo 15:59, 7 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

The section you copied here is almost entirely derived from an interview with the lead singer and has therefore not been re-worded. If there's a need for it, I can re-write that part, but do you have any other examples or suggestions? --HarryCane 18:02, 7 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Even ignoring the overlong quote, it's still bad grammar. There's lots of other examples, such as "However, said singer did not stay with the band for all too long". That's one of the most glaring examples but there are plenty of subtler instances of clumsy phrasing that a good copyeditor would be able to fix for you. There are also some POV / OR issues, especially with the "Musical Style and Critical Reception" section; examples: "blink-182 relied heavily on their rudimentary single guitar/bass/drums arrangements"; "a total of eleven songs, all of which were more raucous and energetic than those on the band's previous efforts". Soo 20:23, 7 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Object - I found the language to informal in a number of places. Example: "After calling it quits...". Idioms such as "calling it quits" should be avoided when possible, in order to assist readers less familiar with these phrases, such as forigners or those who have learned english as a second language. Fieari 07:06, 8 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Support. Great article, especially when compared to other articles about similar bands. --Fritz Saalfeld (Talk) 12:10, 12 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]

Comment - Not bad, but some of the writing in this article suffers from POV, weasal words, awkard phrasing, and other factors which help contribute to an overall unencyclopedic tone. Wisdom89 05:36, 14 April 2006 (UTC)[reply]