Talk:Tal al-Mallohi

Section: The issue of Tal al-Mallohi

Can anyone fix this? The section "The issue of Tal al-Mallohi" is a complete mess. Information that is supposed to be in articles isn't and information that would be interesting, for example, her family's background history in Syrian politics, although possibly mentioned (but unverified) does not have a viable reference source. Aside from the language being a mess, the reference sources do not tie into the summary being made. Apparently the parents have visited the girl, since the UK Guardian runs a story saying so (listed in one of the references), but the Wikipedia article does not disclose this & in fact repeatedly argues the opposite. Maybe the art of reading and comprehension should be more of a priority than someone's personal agenda. I tried to fix some of this but can anyone fix the remainder of this? Stevenmitchell (talk) 00:14, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

External links

This article contained an extraordinary number of external links; I've moved the majority of them to here, and suggest that these be mined for information and integrated into the article rather than serving as a directory. Khazar2 (talk) 03:55, 7 April 2012 (UTC)

• Syria accuses teenage blogger of spying for a foreign power
• Syria accuses teenage blogger of spying
• Syrian teen-aged girl Tal al-Mallohi 'accused of spying'
• Syria Accuses Teen Blogger of Spying
• Mother of Syrian blogger seeks president's help
• Free Tal NOW! - A blog dedicated to latest information and news on Tal Mallohi case.
• Tal Mallohi's mother letter to the Syrian president Bashar Assed appealing for her daughter's release.
• Statement Requesting for Immediate Release of Tal Mallohi 13-9-2010
• Syrian Human Rights Committee: Press release about the detention of Tal Mallohi
• Syrian Human Rights Committee: Arab Blggers Union about Tal Mallohi detention on the ground of her blogging articles
• Reporters Without Borders: Young student held incommunicado for past nine month over blog entries
• Tal al-Mallohi's Page on Facebook

This entry needs an extreme overhaul

The grammatical errors, awkward phrasing of several entries, it just doesn't seem anywhere near up to Wikipedia's standards, it looks like it was written by a student who hasn't quite grasped basic spelling and grammar usage. Very slipshod and unorganized. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.158.55.30 (talk) 16:39, 31 October 2012 (UTC)

This entry needs an extreme overhaul

The grammatical errors, awkward phrasing of several entries, it just doesn't seem anywhere near up to Wikipedia's standards, it looks like it was written by a student who hasn't quite grasped basic spelling and grammar usage. Very slipshod and unorganized. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.158.55.30 (talk) 16:42, 31 October 2012 (UTC)

End of sentence?

Well, if she was sentenced to five years on the date stated, that has expired by now. So was she actually released? This seems unlikely, but if not, then what pretence is she being held under now> 2600:1004:B16D:9933:18DD:12DF:512F:1C68 (talk) 17:27, 27 January 2018 (UTC)