Talk:Lew Krausse Sr.

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:10, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Well, after reviewing Jr., it only makes sense that I should take on this one as well! — GhostRiver 17:10, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• "whom he helped win" → "with whom he won"
• Very pedantic: should be a period after "Jr" in "Lew Jr."

Early life

• Switch order of sentences so that the fastball is sandwiched between his high school career & Athletics signing

Philadelphia Athletics

• Today in voices I hear: an undergraduate professor telling me never to start a sentence with "However". Here, especially, because some people read one section at a time and the part about his signing is in a different section, the construction of the first sentence jolts the reader
• "in place of them" → "in their place"
• Link unearned run and complete game
• A little more awkward setup here: I think it can be made clearer that Mack was resting his pitchers so that they could be sharp for the Series and that this was still the regular season.
• Link "doubleheaders" to Doubleheader (baseball) and home run
• The idea that Sunday baseball was once prohibited in PA is wild to me; my godmother's family have Sunday season ticket packages

Sore arm

• Make sure NYPL is linked to New York–Pennsylvania League (1923–1937) and not to the 1939–2020 club

Elmira

• I understand it's because of the name change, but it's awkward that this is the one section that doesn't have the team name
  • Since it was Pioneers 3 out of 4 seasons, I think it's fine to call it Elmira Pioneers. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:22, 29 January 2022 (UTC)
• "won a career-high 24 games, setting the Elmira team record" → "set a franchise record with a career-high 24 games won"
• "6.5 games" → "6+1⁄2 games"
• Link Hazleton Mountaineers (baseball) and Wilkes-Barre (minor league baseball club)
• "third baseman/outfielder" → "third baseman and outfielder"

Cardinals and Red Sox organizations

• No apostrophes needed in the header

Military and final season

• "he was relying on curveballs to get hitters out" → "he was best known for his "assortment of curveballs"" (or something of that sort, I just really like the newspaper quote)

Post-playing career

• Commas around "the Phillies" instead of dashes
• Link and capitalize Midwestern United States

Personal life

• Link heart attack
• Normally I'd ask for a cause of death but none of his obits seemed to mention it
  • I know, right? Doesn't help that 90% of the "Lew Krausse" obituaries are for his son... Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 21:26, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

References

• Good

General comments

• Images are public domain and relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Earwig score looks great, even the mirror sites have a low % match

Putting on hold now! — GhostRiver 17:36, 29 January 2022 (UTC)

Excellent work, passing now! — GhostRiver 21:46, 31 January 2022 (UTC)