Talk:Hyde Park, London/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Dr. Blofeld in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 12:38, 10 August 2017 (UTC)Reply


I'll review this on the weekend, I didn't realize it had been in the queue this long!♦ Dr. Blofeld 12:38, 10 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

@Ritchie333: Apologies for the delay, reading now :-)♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:05, 15 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Lede

"It opened to the public in the early 17th century" -can we be more precise?

Fixed Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 16:20, 15 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
History
  • "Military executions were common in Hyde Park at this time; John Rocque's Map of London, 1746 marks a point inside the park as "the stone where soldiers are shot."[19]" -is there anything else worth mentioning? A footnote with some details might be good here.
I've dropped something in a footnote. As the map is obviously PD, it's online, and you can see for yourself the spot that is proudly marked "where soldiers are shot"! Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 14:58, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "The first coherent landscaping in Hyde Park was undertaken by Charles Bridgeman for Queen Caroline (wife of King George II),[16] under the supervision of Charles Withers, the Surveyor-General of Woods and Forests." -when?
1726. I've expanded this a bit Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "The Hyde Park Lido first opened in 1930. It was designed by the Commissioner of Works, George Lansbury, and still sees regular use in the summer.[24]" -a bit "notey", is there a way to elaborate or flesh out the parts on 20th century history a bit so it flows better?
Take another look :-) Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
Features
  • "During the late 20th century, over 9,000 elm trees in Hyde Park were killed by Dutch elm disease." -can you elaborate, seems quite notable to me.
I've added a bit more, but the sources I have just say pretty much what's in the article now and leave it at that :-/ Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • " 7-tonne" worth converting?
I don't see why not. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
Concerts
  • "while John Peel later said it was "the nicest concert I’ve ever been to"." -seem a little out of place here
Well John Peel is known for have attended quite a few gigs, so to pick one out like that is a kind of significant. Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Overall seem to cover what is required for GA level but in places it does still seem a bit "notey" and could do with some polishing still.♦ Dr. Blofeld 10:27, 15 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

@Dr. Blofeld: Okay, I've beefed up the article so it's got another 2K of prose, mostly in the 20th - 21st century area as requested. Any other comments? Ritchie333 (talk) (cont) 15:47, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply

Looks good Ritchie for GA, thankyou for being one of the few people to bother with core articles like this and the pier.


GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose quality:  
    B. MoS compliance:  
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. References to sources:  
    B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:  
    C. No original research:  
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:  
    B. Focused:  
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:  
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:  
    B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:  
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  Dr. Blofeld 18:04, 16 August 2017 (UTC)Reply
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