Talk:Byington Ford/Archive 1

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• Information to be added or removed: I would like improve this article by adding the following citation: Add to Lead section: "He built the first commerical development in Carmel Valley, comprising an airport and business district."
• Explanation of issue: Article needs WP:GNG citations.
• References supporting change: Add the following citation: Monterey County : the dramatic story of its past. Page 202. Greg Henderson (talk) 01:50, 19 July 2020 (UTC)

Hi Greg Henderson. I have verified that your suggestion is indeed supported by the book you cited, but as it is copied nearly word-for-word from the book, it needs to be paraphrased before I add it. Please include a properly formatted cite to the book as well. Best, Altamel (talk) 18:29, 19 July 2020 (UTC)

Thanks Altamel! Here is a revised text to add and citation: "He established the first commercial development in Carmel Valley, comprising of the Carmel Valley Airport and Carmel Valley Village."Monterey County: the dramatic story of its past. --Greg Henderson (talk) 18:44, 19 July 2020 (UTC)

You're welcome, Greg Henderson. However, two issues persist. First, the revised text structurally still resembles the original. I might just be copyright-paranoid at this point, but better to play it safe. Second, the cite needs to be to the book itself, not the WorldCat entry, so include the page number. Best, Altamel (talk) 18:54, 19 July 2020 (UTC)

No problem. Here is the actual book and text update: "Ford established the first business expansion in Carmel Valley, including the Carmel Valley Airport and Carmel Valley Village." --Greg Henderson (talk) 19:35, 19 July 2020 (UTC)

 Done Altamel (talk) 19:56, 19 July 2020 (UTC)