Talk:Bosa of York/GA1
Latest comment: 11 years ago by Malleus Fatuorum in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 17:29, 26 August 2012 (UTC)
Lead
- "He was educated and became a monk at Whitby Abbey". That's a little ambiguous; he was educated (possibly not at Whitby Abbey) and then became a monk at the abbey? Or was he educated at Whitby Abbey, where he subsequently became a monk?
- "Bosa's section was centered on the city of York". I'm not fond of the word "section" here. What about something like "authority", or "jurisdiction" instead?
Life
- "In 678, after Wilfrid was ejected from the bishopric of York and banished from Northumbria, Bosa was appointed to part of Wilfrid's diocese. Bosa owed his appointment to Theodore of Tarsus the Archbishop of Canterbury and King Ecgfrith of Northumbria, but the diocese of York was divided amongst three different bishops." I think the chronology's a bit awkward here. We should be told that the diocese was divided between three bishops before we're told that Bosa was appointed as one of them IMO.
- "While archbishop, Bosa introduced a communal life for the clergy of the cathedral". Bosa was never an archbishop was he?
Notes
- "One of the other two bishops appointed to the other parts of Wilfrid's old diocese were Eata for Bernicia with his cathedral at Lindesfarne". Presumably Bernicia was the name given to one of the three parts? Do we know what names were given to the other two? I'm not fond of that "other ... other"; could we not just say "one of the two bishops appointed to the other parts ..."?
References
- Why duplicate the ODNB sources when they're already cited in the Citations section? Why not add the full details there?
- I've seen this, I know I need to work on it... but real life is really whomping my butt. Hopefully in the next few days. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:55, 3 September 2012 (UTC)
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