Talk:Thomas Müller/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Mr.Kennedy1 ^{talk guestbook} 16:37, 30 September 2010 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

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Hello ArtVandelay13, I will be reviewing this article. I decided to review as it has been sitting in GAN for so long.

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Missing a reference at the end of Early years. [1] - This is a dead link, must be fixed.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   The lead seems to come across very positively, try and make this less positive (make sure it dosen't become negative though)

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   The image of the Argentina-Germany game has way too long of a caption that is not really needed. Make it shorter.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

I'm going to put this article on hold for seven days until the article has the problems fixed. Mr.Kennedy1 ^{talk guestbook} 16:37, 30 September 2010 (UTC)

OK, well I've reduced the image caption and removed the broken ref (it was actually in the 2010 World Cup section). I'm not sure about the lead, though - he's had a short, successful and uncontroversial career, it's hard to know what to write that's not being negative for the sake of it. Looking at other GAs for footballers and it doesn't look atypical. ArtVandelay13 (talk) 12:24, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

Right, you shortened the caption down well and removed the broken ref. It's OK to disagree with me as I am new to the reviewing process. I suppose their isn't really anything negative about his career you can say really as he had a brilliant World Cup, Champos league and Bundesliga last season. I moved the reference to the end of the early career section as it covers the last setence too. OK, I am going to say pass. Well done! Mr.Kennedy1 ^{talk guestbook} 13:27, 2 October 2010 (UTC)

Thanks! ArtVandelay13 (talk) 17:32, 2 October 2010 (UTC)