Talk:Paz Vizsla/GA1
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 14:05, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
Shall be reviewing this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 14:05, 21 April 2020 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- Pass/Fail:
Lead
edit- "Favreau also previously voiced the similarly-named Pre Vizsla, a Mandalorian warlord in the computer-animated television series Star Wars: The Clone Wars." - Think this sentence is out of place for the lead
Appearances
edit- I think the whole paragraph could be divided into two for better readability
- "and although the Empire has fallen out of power by this time, the clan has not yet regained its former status or power." - repetition of "power"
- "when the Mandalorian is attacked by multiple bounty hunters after rescued" - after he
Characterization
edit- "Paz Vizla is physically imposing, displaying great height and tremendous strength,[4][9][13] He is tough and aggressive,[7][14]" - major punctuation error
- "This is demonstrated by his willingness to place his own safety and the safety of his tribe" - close repetition of "safety"
Portrayal
edit- "of The Mandalorian.[17][18][16]" - please put the references in numerical order
- "on the computer-animated television series Star Wars: The Clone Wars," - try not to have too many wikilinks close together per MOS:OVERLINK
Critical reception
edit- "Inverse writer Jake Kleinman called a "fan-favorite character" " - called him
- "particularly describing his salute in particular" - words in bold are unneeded
- "A headline for a /Film story by Ethan Anderton described him as called him an" - the words in bold are unneeded
- Maybe add a wikilink for Baby Yoda?
Merchandise
edit- "The figure is 12.5 inches (32 cm) in height," - use abbr=on in the convert template
- "Hasbro also released a six-inch action figure of Paz" - how about using the convert template on the text in bold?
References
edit- Think you may want to consider archiving the sources that do not have archive links for consistency
- Reference 2 is actually Den of Geek not IGN
- Shouting (MOS:CAPS) should be avoided in Reference 24
Will put the review on hold to allow the editor to address/query all the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 15:13, 21 April 2020 (UTC)