Talk:Parma Calcio 1913/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: NapHit (talk · contribs) 19:17, 13 April 2012 (UTC)

Lead

• Quick note, if something is referenced later in the article then it does not need to be referenced in the lead.
• I would split the first para, as it's quite long, split after "Parma Emilia-Romagna.
• "Parma have played their home matches in..." -> "Parma has played its home matches at..." problem with singular and plural usage, one should be used not both in conjunction
• Same in the first sentence of the next para, have should be has
• "Although the team does not have the firepower to compete for a place in Europe, nor is it weak enough to be relegated." That statement is POV and should have o place in an encyclopaedic article
• "a collection of Europe's most elite clubs representing clubs..." repeat usage of clubs

History

• "adopting its yellow and blue as its colours"
• We have 1935-36 season linked and 1919-20, 1928-29 seasons unlinked, be consistent
• "launched plans to build a stadium, the Stadio Ennio Tardini, for the club two years later." launched is not the best word to use in this context, initiated would be better, for the club is redundant, plus the sentence needs a ref.
• Not happy that the first two paras have a total of two refs, when there is a lot of material that could be challenged.
• "Following the restart of organised football, Parma enjoyed three years in Serie B, then split into two regional divisions, before again being relegated in 1948–49 to Serie C, where they would spend another five seasons before an eleven-year spell in Serie B, including the achievement of ninth position in 1954–55, a club record at that time." Another long sentence, recommend you split it
• "This was an era in which the club's players generally held down other jobs or were still in education and where the town's amateur rugby union and volleyball sides proved more popular among the more privileged." definitely needs referencing
• Why do you mention the success of the rugby and volleyball teams? this is an article about a football club, I don't see the relevance of mentioning their achievements
• "Parma made their debut on the European stage" European stage is not encyclopaedic, change to European competition

This is just the lead and first section of the lead and two paras of the history section, yet there are numerous issues, so I'm not going to review the rest of the article, as I'm sure the problems exist there as well. One section I will review further is the referencing which is in a dire state.

Refs

• There are numerous from sites that I would deem unreliable, the first ref doesn't look reliable looks like a polish fan site, couldn't you just use the official site
• Football Italia, Bleacher Report, goal.com, ghost goal, sportsbook24.net, APC Petitot.it, forzaitalian football are not reliable sources and would urge them to be replaced
• refs that are PDFs need the parameter |format=PDF adding
• Ref links should not have capitals in them, even if the website has them, we don't include them

Regrettably, I'm going to fail the article as there any too many problems at the moment, with referencing being the primary concern followed closely by the prose. I would suggest finding books detailing the club's history and finding someone to copyedit the article. NapHit (talk) 19:17, 13 April 2012 (UTC)