Talk:Effects of Typhoon Bopha in the Caroline Islands/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 01:49, 24 July 2015 (UTC)

• "Bopha passed just south of the island nation" - I'd specify the exact mileage. It's pretty important IMO.
• "Rapid intensification" - why capitalized?
• Why is Bopha listed as a C4 in the infobox? Its main article said it was a C5. You never say in the article what its ultimate peak winds were, so I'm confused why you only mention peak of C4.
  • Added a mention of the JTWC C5 peak, but for effects articles don't we only show the intensity of the storm when it struck the areas in question rather than its peak? Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:49, 3 August 2015 (UTC)
• Some of the background seems extraneous, considering the article's subject matter. Namely toward the end of the first paragraph.
• [1] - plenty more info for Chuuk and FSM via NCDC. [2] - ditto Palau
• The second paragraph of impact should probably be split up.
• "pushed several hundred feet inland, cutting off roads and leaving behind several feet of debris" - interesting you use "feet" here, while the rest of the article uses metric first.
  • Source only mentioned feet so that's what I went with. Could be wrong to say "several hundred meters" as even 300 ft is less than 100 m. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:49, 3 August 2015 (UTC)
• You use $20 million in damage in the infobox, but the article says $15 to 20. Has there ever been an update? Perhaps use the $15 and the damagespre parameter to say "at least"?
• "some roads on Koror were damaged by storm surge and impassable" - the "impassable" feels out of place here. I'd put that before "damaged" for better flow.

All in all a good read! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:49, 24 July 2015 (UTC)