Talk:Edward Wells (RNZAF officer)/GA1
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Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:39, 2 November 2020 (UTC)
- The second paragraph of the lead contains five sentences all starting with "He". Can this be varied a bit?
- "The Second World War was well underway at the time of Wells' completion of flying training and, now a pilot officer," - Link pilot officer
- "The next month Wells was promoted to flying officer" - Link flying officer
- What was the cause of death?
- The later life section has three sentences starting with "He" and a fourth with "His". Can this be varied?
- Is there a specific reason why RAF Bawdsey is not included in the list of his commands in the infobox
- Considering consolidating the later life and postwar career sections, these are both rather short sections.
- External link is about Alan Deere, doesn't look relevant
Looks good beyond those little points, placing on hold. Hog Farm Bacon 20:31, 2 November 2020 (UTC)