Talk:Blue (BigBang song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: -ink&fables (talk · contribs) 06:20, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

This is my first GA review. Although I will try my best, please feel free to correct me. I will leave my first set of comments in 24 hours. Thank you. -ink&fables «talk» 06:20, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

@-ink&fables: Thank you for your time in reviewing my GAN! ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 17:11, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lead

I will review this part at the last. -ink&fables «talk» 14:23, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Edited by myself. -ink&fables «talk» 07:43, 6 July 2021 (UTC)

Background and release

• Unsourced: On February 7, 2012, YG Entertainment announced that Big Bang would be making a comeback with their fifth Korean-language mini album, titled Alive on February 29.

Sourced to ref 2 (Just a note: please check the next reference cited after the sentence to see whether the information is supported, as sometimes multiple sentences are sourced to the same ref).

• Why mini album is used in this section when extended play is used in the lede?

As both of them are synonymous in the Kpop industry and to vary wording.

• Remove wikilink from Korean per MOS:OVERLINK
• Why YG is used intead of the complete name?

Referring to the company as simply YG is common so writing out the entire name every time it's mentioned is unnecessary in my view.

I would suggest to use complete name or a pronoun (wherever possible) because just using YG may arise questions to some readers. -ink&fables «talk» 14:08, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

When referring to Yang Hyun-suk himself, I usually would write "Yang" rather than "YG", and other articles do that to. I don't see much of a need to write YG Entertainment every time.

• See if Alive Galaxy Tour is the tour being mentioned here. If yes, then please unlink concert tour per MOS:LINKCLARITY and restructure the sentence linking to Alive Galaxy Tour.
• Unsourced: it was unveiled that the song would consist of a emotional concept, a change of style from some of their prior releases,

I added an additional source for the emotional bit

• Unsourced: The song was subsequently released as planned by YG Entertainment and marked Big Bang's first single in almost a year, since "Love Song" in April 2011.
• Unlink YG Entertainment here, instead link it in the first line of this section.
• Better source needed: It was made available worldwide on multiple platforms for digital download and streaming. Current source is only a profile of the song from Melon and doesn't prove worldwide release on multiple platforms.

Added Apple Music source

• This statement requires copy-edit: A Japanese-language version of the track was recorded and included as part of the groups fourth Japanese studio album Alive, which was released on March 28, 2012.

General note: if you have a suggestion for improving a sentence, you can provide it

• In the last line: correct the typo in Big Band's

 Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 17:11, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Composition

• long-time group collaborator → group's long-time collaborator
• Better source needed: The current source doesn't verify Teddy being group's long-time collaborator and that additional rap lyrics were written by T.O.P.

Removed

• Credit The Korea Herald's reporter/staff (for example, Yim Hyun-su of The Korea Herald characterized...) OR can be written as: The Korea Herald article characterized...
• “crispy → "crispy (see inverted comma)
• Suggestion: join these two sentences: Deemed as a stylistic shift from much of the group's previous releases, Big Bang embraces a more emotional side of the them seldom exposed to the public. Highlighting their mature vocals, the song attracted attention among fans and journalists for its ability in showcasing a side of Big Bang that is not often presented through their music. Example: Deemed as a stylistic shift from much of the group's previous releases, Big Bang embraces a more emotional side of the them highlighting their mature vocals.

 Done ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 17:00, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

Reception

• The song received generally positive reviews from music critics, → The song received positive reviews from music critics, OR "Blue" primarily received positive reviews from music critics,
• musical styles → musical style
• The Borneo Post described → The Borneo Post review described OR Daniel from The Borneo Post described OR The Borneo Post's Daniel described
• included the song in their list of the best Big Bang songs, calling "Blue" → included "Blue" on their list of Big Bang's best songs, calling it OR included the song on their list of Big Bang's best songs, calling "Blue"
• ranked it the second best K-pop single of 2012, → ranked it second on their list of 2012's best K-pop singles,
• Use one either Gaon Chart Music Awards or Gaon Chart K-Pop Awards in both prose and table; more preferably the one which was used then at the time of ceremony
• Unsourced (highlighted): I'm not considering if source has been cited in any other section of the article
  • The song opened at number one on the Gaon Digital Chart, becoming the group's third number one single.
  • It had the highest first week sales of 2012 and the biggest debut sales of a boy band song of all time in the Gaon Chart, garnering 833,233 units in digital sales.
  • By the end of the year, "Blue" accumulated a total of 3,365,275 digital downloads and 24,040,039 units in digital streams, ranking as the fourth best-selling song and the tenth best-performing single overall when factoring in digitals, streams, and instrumental downloads.
  • Apart from Gaon, the song also experienced success on the K-pop Hot 100, debuting at number one on the Korean Billboard chart and remained at the top position for three weeks.
  • On the US World Digital Songs, "Blue" peaked at number three, becoming their second top-three track on the international chart.
• Apart from Gaon, the song also experienced success on the K-pop Hot 100, debuting at number one on the Korean Billboard chart and → Apart from Gaon, the song also experienced success on the Billboard's K-pop Hot 100 debuting at number one and
• Unsourced: and remains standing as one of the best-selling singles in the country. Because I think sales can be combined from different sources, but per WP:SYNTHESIS we can't reach to a conclusion like "one of the best-selling singles in the country".

Music video and promotion

• Wikilink Love Song
• Justin Noto of Agon Creative commented → Justin Noto commented
• Remove wikilink from New York
• Nuto added that "but the city → Noto added that "the city
• selected the wooden Luna Park Coney Island Cyclone as one → selected the Coney Island Cyclone, a wooden roller coaster at Luna Park, as one
• street along The Cyclone → street along the Cyclone
• Wikilink Fantastic Baby

Sales

• Why digital is in brackets next to South Korea? I read some Featured Articles; I saw that generally the Chart or recording industry's name is put in the brackets.
• Wikilink KuGou

Comments

Hi @Nkon21: I have left few comments. Please reply with  Done, disagreement, question, etc. next to each point. -ink&fables «talk» 14:23, 1 July 2021 (UTC)

Hi @Nkon21: I hope you are doing well. I have reviewed the entire article except the infobox and lead, which I will review after you take care of all the comments. I have also left some comments next to your replies, please check them too. Feel free to disagree to any changes but do explain. Thank you. -ink&fables «talk» 14:08, 2 July 2021 (UTC)

Hi @Nkon21: I just wanted to just check that how much time you need. I am flexible with anything but knowing exactly gives some insurance. -ink&fables «talk» 16:12, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

@-ink&fables: Sorry for the wait, I took a brief break from Wiki for the fourth of July holiday in the US. I believe that I have addressed everything so far, if there is anything else that needs attention please let me know. ɴᴋᴏɴ21 ❯❯❯ talk 20:00, 5 July 2021 (UTC)

@Nkon21: I have made few edits on my own, and I think it is now satisfying the good article criteria. I am closing the review. Congratulations!! on your fourth successful GAN. -ink&fables «talk» 07:43, 6 July 2021 (UTC)