Talk:The Web Planet/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: SL93 (talk · contribs) 02:29, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Lead

• Pipe science fiction television to Science fiction on television.
• Pipe BBC1 to BBC One.
• Pipe bull ants to Myrmecia (ant).
• Pipe free enterprise to free market.
• Pipe stock music to production music.

Production

• Pipe bull ants to Myrmecia (ant).
• "unearthly musique concrète performances" - How were they unearthly?
• "Moving house" does not sound encyclopedic. Same with "was on holiday" and "took around 30 minutes to don."
• Pipe free enterprise to free market.
• Pipe suits of armour to plate armour.

Filming

• Pipe BBC Television Film Studios to Ealing Studios
• "to accommodate for Hill's holiday" - What holiday?
• "Fifteen bags of seaweed from Cornish Manures were requested for the fourth episode" - Why were they requested?

Broadcast and ratings

• Pipe BBC Television Centre to Television Centre, London
• Pipe BBC1 to BBC One.

Critical response

• Pipe good versus evil to good and evil.
• Pipe The Stage and Television Today to The Stage
• Didn't should be did not.

Commercial releases

• VHS doesn't need to be linked as a common term.
• DVD doesn't need to be linked as a common term.
• Pipe BBC DVD to 2 Entertain.
• Pipe BBC Audio to AudioGO.
• Pipe vinyl record to phonograph record.
• Pipe Demon Records to Demon Music Group.
• Pipe Frederick Muller Ltd to Hutchinson (publisher).

Notes

• Stock music doesn't need to be linked again.
• Pipe Les Structures Sonores to Baschet Brothers.

Discussion

@SL93: Thank you for your review. Just a quick response to some of your comments:

• Piped links are unnecessary per WP:NOTBROKE.
• I'm not entirely sure what part of "took around 30 minutes to don" you find informal.
• "Didn't" is part of a direct quote.
• The duplicate link to stock music is permitted per MOS:DL, as it is part of a footnote.

I've addressed the remainder of your concerns. Please let me know if there's anything else. – Rhain ☔ 04:52, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

@Rhain: It’s not that it’s informal, but that don is an old-fashioned word that isn’t used much and may not be understood by some readers. I won’t argue with you if you don’t want to change the wording due to it being correct. Sorry about the “didn’t” issue - I mixed up articles that I was reading today. As for the redirects, I was basing it off of other GA reviews and I now see that those were just nitpicking. SL93 (talk) 05:38, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

@SL93: I don't disagree that it's a tad old-fashioned, but I'm struggling to think of an alternative; I'd prefer the slightly outdated "don" than something as informal as "put on" or "get into". If you have any better suggestions, please let me know. – Rhain ☔ 10:45, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

@Rhain: You have a good point. I will pass this GA this evening. I'm heading out the door now for work. Sorry about there being a wait. SL93 (talk) 13:27, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

@SL93: No need to apologise. Thanks again for the review! – Rhain ☔ 13:29, 6 January 2022 (UTC)

Passing. SL93 (talk) 00:14, 7 January 2022 (UTC)

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