Talk:Sakura (Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle)/GA1

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Reviewer: Johanna (talk · contribs) 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

Second on my "to review" list. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 19:42, 7 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

Thanks. I'll give my best.Tintor2 (talk) 22:39, 7 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

Comments

Infobox and Lead
  • Instead of putting her two appearances on different lines, put "Tsubasa: Reservoir Chronicle and xxxHolic character" as it is in the article Frasier Crane, Addison Montgomery, and other characters who appear in multiple series.
  • Be sure the lead follows the structure of the article (i.e. earlier sections come first in the lead). If you find that that doesn't make sense, change the section layout instead.
  • Are there two characters named Sayoran in two different mangas? If so, specify this.
Creation and conception
  • "the characters of Osamu Tezuka" upon first reading, it appears that Osamu Tezuka is a character to those of us who don't know any better. :) I would replace it with "the characters created by Osamu Tezuka"
  • Also, how are they similar to each other? Is this sourced?
  • What's an OVA?
  • "Makino pointed…" Do you mean "pointed out"?
Character outline
  • Why exactly are the chapter titles in French?
  • Just a question: why is there a big jump in references between chapters 32 and 145?
  • How did Fei-Wang die exactly?
  • Does the anime series make any changes to her storyline?
Reception
  • It should probably be "popular among readers" not "within"
  • Who was she second to in the first poll? In the second poll, what rank was she and who was she behind?
  • I might place this rankings stuff at the end of the section, as this is more typical.
  • "Megan Lavey initially called" Could you elaborate a bit on her opinions? It's a bit unclear what she was getting at right now.
References
  • Refs 44 and 50 are dead.

@Tintor2: Nice article and nice writing! I was expecting to have a lot of comments on the plot summary, but it was quite well written! Clear this up and you'll be set to go. :) Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 02:49, 10 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

I've done some work and:

  • I moved the creation section per WP:Lead.
  • Is it okay to write "pointed out."? I mean it's a phrasal verb.
  • I would add the original Syaoran in the lead but the character is introduced in the second half of the series.
  • Found an archive ref 50. I don't know which one is ref 44 after moving the article's lead.
  • The anime doesn't go anywhere and is followed by the original video animations
  • The manga in both Japanese and English uses the word Chapitre.

@BenLinus1214: Tintor2 (talk) 14:59, 10 September 2015 (UTC)Reply

@Tintor2: The old ref 44 is now ref 56 (animage). Other than that, I can definitely pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 16:25, 10 September 2015 (UTC)Reply
Never mind, I found an archive-url quickly. Pass. Johanna (formerly BenLinus1214)talk to me!see my work 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)Reply
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
Thanks.Tintor2 (talk) 16:28, 10 September 2015 (UTC)Reply