Talk:Donald Sutherland (explorer)/GA1
Latest comment: 2 years ago by GhostRiver in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 02:29, 1 January 2022 (UTC)
Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not retired, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.
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Infobox and lede edit
- Per MOS:IMGSIZE, don't use a fixed pixel size for the infobox image
- Per MOS:SEAOFBLUE, "Wick, Caithness" should be one link to Wick instead of two separate links to town and county
and was survived by his wife
trivia for the lede
Early life edit
- Split first sentence into two after "1843 or 1844"
- "at Fort George at nearby Ardersier" → "at Fort George in nearby Ardersier"
New Zealand edit
- Per MOS:IDIOM, use "deserting the company" instead of "jumping ship"
- "prospecting for gold
althoughto no avail" he had enough
replace with more encyclopedic phrasing- "Island and enlisted" → "Island, where he enlisted"
- "corps and at the end of hostilities in the region was" → "corps, and after hostilities ended in the region, Sutherland was"
- "prospecting but this time" → "prospecting, this time"
Armed Constabulary service edit
- Second sentence should be split into two to improve clarity
Milford Sound edit
- "provisions provided by" → "provisions afforded by"
- No comma after "by the Lake County"
- Comma after "and the highest in the world"
- That only "sound" is linked appears a bit of a WP:EASTEREGG
Later life edit
- "When he died, only his wife was present at Milford Sound." → "Upon his death, his wife was the only individual present at Milford Sound."
References edit
- Good
General comments edit
- Both images are in the public domain and relevant
- No stability concerns in the revision history
- Earwig score indicates no obvious copyvio
Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments. Please let me know if you have any questions, and ping me when you're finished! — GhostRiver 18:36, 2 January 2022 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking the time to review this article GhostRiver, much appreciated. I have made a number of edits in response to your feedback, which are here. Please note my comment above regarding bullet point no. 4 in the New Zealand section. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 02:29, 3 January 2022 (UTC)