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Resolution
Location in the North Pacific

Resolution Guyot is an undersea volcanic mountain with a flat top in the Mid-Pacific Mountains, west of Hawaii and northeast of the Marshall Islands. Rising 500 metres (1,600 ft) above the seafloor to a depth of about 1,320 metres (4,330 ft), it has a roughly circular summit platform 35 kilometres (22 mi) wide. The guyot originated as a volcanic island, probably formed 107–129 million years ago by a South Pacific hotspot in today's French Polynesia before the volcano was shifted north by plate tectonics. After it was flattened by erosion, carbonate deposition formed a platform with an atoll-like structure. The platform emerged above sea level between the Albian and Turonian ages, but drowned for reasons unknown during the Cretaceous Period. Thermal subsidence lowered the seamount to its present depth. After a hiatus, manganese crusts and pelagic sediments were deposited, some of which were later modified by phosphates. (Full article...)

Just a suggested blurb ... thoughts and edits are welcome. (The map will be shifted to the left.) - Dank (push to talk) 18:37, 13 October 2019 (UTC)Reply

Is it just me or does the blurb kind of forget what guyot we are talking about mid-text? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 20:18, 13 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
Better? - Dank (push to talk) 20:49, 13 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
I'd perhaps say "before it was shifted north by plate tectonics". Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 08:17, 14 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
Couldn't "it" refer to either the hotspot or the island (for a reader who doesn't know a lot about hotspots)? - Dank (push to talk) 13:07, 14 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
Aye, perhaps putting "guyot" instead of the pronoun would work. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 14:10, 14 October 2019 (UTC)Reply
Was it a guyot the whole time? I tried "volcano". - Dank (push to talk) 14:35, 14 October 2019 (UTC)Reply