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Donald Forrester Brown (23 February 1890 – 1 October 1916) was a New Zealand recipient of the Victoria Cross, the highest award for valour in the face of the enemy that could be awarded at that time to members of the British and Commonwealth armed forces. Born in Dunedin, Brown was a farmer when the First World War began. In late 1915, he volunteered for service abroad with the New Zealand Expeditionary Force (NZEF) and was posted to the 2nd Battalion, the Otago Infantry Regiment. Fighting on the Western Front, he performed the actions that led to the award of the Victoria Cross in September 1916 during the Battle of Flers–Courcelette, part of the Somme offensive. As he was killed several days later during the Battle of Le Transloy, the award was made posthumously. His Victoria Cross was the second to be awarded to a soldier serving with the NZEF during the war and was the first earned in an action on the Western Front. (Full article...)

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Hi Zawed and congratulations. A draft blurb for this article is above. Thoughts, comments and edits from you or from anyone else interested are welcome. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:41, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

Thanks Gog. I think possibly there should be a comma after September 1916? Otherwise, the draft blurb reads fine. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 22:36, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

Hi Zawed: I am pretty sure it shouldn't, but its your blurb, so if you want to put one in, go for it. No doubt the big brains will sort it out one way or another down the road. Gog the Mild (talk) 23:19, 14 March 2020 (UTC)

If you as the resident GOCE specialist think it should be there, I'll roll with that! Cheers, Zawed (talk) 09:19, 19 March 2020 (UTC)

Zawed, careful; I'll be getting ideas above my station. Gog the Mild (talk) 10:02, 19 March 2020 (UTC)