Wikipedia:WikiProject Video games/Peer review/1 vs 100 (Xbox 360)

1 vs 100 (Xbox 360) edit

My work on this has stalled a little bit, I'd like some outside eyes to give me some pointers on what can be improved. –xeno^talk 05:06, 7 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Comments by David Fuchs

Ugh... *shudder* game show video games...

Obviously since the game isn't out yet, a lot of the content hasn't gelled and it's rather unstable (not to mention incomplete). One thing I've noticed so far is that the lead goes into too much detail about the mechanics of the game, while the gameplay section presumes too much familiarity with the game and goes into too little detail. Instead of starting off "At the beginning of each 1 vs 100 Live round," explain that 1 vs 100 is a (blankety-blank) game, et al. Look at other VG FAs for examples.
Some stuff might have to be wikilinked, or at least explained (like what is Xbox Live Primetime?)
You should refer to the hosts by their last names (Taylor instead of Jen, et al).
The prose could use a copyedit
I'll try looking through my print databases for any more refs that you can use. --Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 14:44, 8 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]
- I've got a few bits that might be useful. Send me an email and I'll reply with a PDF attachment. --Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs^(talk) 01:13, 16 July 2009 (UTC)[reply]