Wikipedia:WikiProject Tropical cyclones/Assessment/Hurricane Alicia

Hurricane Alicia

Archived discussion. Current status: {{B-Class}}

Wanting it for B-GA class. Currently has {tone} on it.Mitchazenia 22:06, 2 April 2007 (UTC)

Right off the bat, I can see several problems just in the lede. Calling Alicia the third cyclone is confusing, as cyclone generally refers to tropical storms or hurricanes. The second sentence doesn't work, either. The article is about Alicia, so why are the second, third, and fourth sentences about history and another hurricane? Writing is poor, and the tone should definitely be there. It goes into too much storm history in the lede — it is supposed to be just an overall summary. The lede should focus more on overall damage stats, such as number of people killed or number of buildings destroyed. Instead, it talks about Carla and the aftermath, a bad idea for the lede. Without even going past the top of the page, I can tell the article needs more work. Hurricanehink (talk) 17:28, 3 April 2007 (UTC)

I revised the intro and found new places for some of it. The Storm History in the intro is gone. Now the intro is too small.Mitchazenia 17:35, 3 April 2007 (UTC)