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Wikipedia:WikiProject Tropical cyclones/Assessment/Effects of Hurricane Wilma in The Bahamas

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Effects of Hurricane Wilma in The Bahamas

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Archived discussion. Current status: {{A-Class}}

Looking at this article again, I think it's up to par for A-class. Any comments? --Hurricanehink (talk) 18:25, 30 October 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ship to FAC sometime soon. Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 07:30, 11 May 2008 (UTC)[reply]

I might take this article to FAC in the future, so I'd like to get a little review before I do so. It's already A-class, so this is more just for another set of eyes. ♬♩ Hurricanehink (talk) 05:54, 29 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

  • The effects of Hurricane Wilma in The Bahamas were generally unexpected and most concentrated on the western portion of Grand Bahama. - Is "most" needed?
  • Hurricane Wilma developed on October 15, 2005 in the Caribbean Sea, and after initially organizing slowly it explosively deepened to reach peak winds of 300 km/h (185 mph) and a record-low pressure of 882 mbar (hPa). - Why is km/h first?
  • While passing the archipelago, the hurricane produced hurricane force winds and a powerful storm surge, flooding southwestern coastal areas of Grand Bahama and destroying hundreds of buildings. - Link archipelago.
  • The central portion of Grand Bahama, including in and around Freeport, reported minor to moderate damage, while the eastern end received little to no damage. - "In and around Freeport" → "the Freeport area".
  • One child died on the island from the flooding. - Did the child drown? Was his/her house collapsed? Clarification needed.
  • Elsewhere in the Bahamas, moderate damage occurred on Abaco and Bimini, while islands further to the south reported minimal wind damage. - Avoid repetition of "damage".
  • The government of the Bahamas advised citizens to rush preparations to completion, though many failed to fully prepare, believing Wilma would pass through the archipelago as a tropical storm. - Is it "The Bahamas", or "the Bahamas" (notice the capitalization)? Be sure to keep that consistent.
  • The total number of storm evacuees was small, estimated from 300 to 1,000 people evacuating. - Awkwardly worded. How about "Evacuations were minimal; it is estimated that between 300 and 1,000 people left"? If not, remove "total" and re-word "estimated from 300 to 1,000 people evacuating".
  • The surge, which reached about 305 m (1,000 ft) inland - This needs better wording, as it implies that the surge was 1,000 ft in height.
  • Damage was estimated at about $100 million (2005 USD, $110 million 2008 USD) on the western portion of the island. - "Estimated" and "about" are redundant. Pick one.
  • More than 7,000 people on the island were directly affected, many of whom had not fully recovered from hurricanes Frances and Jeanne during the previous year. - How were the 7,000 people affected? Does being hit by a little rain count as being affected?
  • A total of 400 buildings throughout the island sustained damage, of which about 200 commercial buildings were extremely damaged and recommended by engineers not to be repaired. - Not sure why, but "extremely damage" reads oddly.
  • Flooding from the hurricane killed one child on the island,[3] the only casualty directly related to Wilma in the archipelago. - Were there any indirect fatalities?
  • There, the hurricane severely damaged a hotel and eight waterfront homes. - Remove "there".
  • Throughout the Bahamas, caused damage to public infrastructure such as schools, roads, health clinics, and electrical systems. - Missing word(s).
  • Electricians restored power to the area around Freeport by the day after[2] and much of the western portion of the island by about three weeks after the hurricane. - Poorly worded.
  • Watch for overlinking and underlinking.
  • As most people failed to prepare significantly for the hurricane, hardware stores and food markets were generally well-stocked. - This bit of info would be better in the preps section.
  • The earlier effects of Wilma on Mexico left many tourist areas closed, leading to a 10% increase in tourism in the Bahamas in December 2005 due to the unavailability in resorts such as Cancún. - Note the redundancy.
  • In the See also section, remove the link to List of Atlantic hurricanes.
  • {{commonscat}} should go in an External links section, which needs to be added.
  • References:

–Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 01:17, 30 November 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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