Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/Murray Bourchier

Murray William James Bourchier edit

The article has been substantially rewritten and expanded since initially assessed as Start class. Suggestions for improvement on the section about his military career would be appreciated. Dbromage 05:51, 31 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Ian Rose edit

I took the liberty of making some formatting mods and one or two minor rephrases. The article looks pretty good and appears to meet most or all B-class requirements. At roughly the current level of detail I could imagine it going one or two classes higher. Some suggestions:

Lose the Trivia section. The info is worthwhile but I would just integrate it into the last part of the Political Career section unless there's somewhere better. On the other hand, if there's something you can add regarding any long-reaching effects of his military or political career, a Legacy section would be the perfect home for it. In that case you could transfer the Lighthorsemen tidbit there and ditch the Popular Culture section as well, no bad thing.
Be good to hear a bit more on his career between WWI and politics. If you can add more there, you could split Military Career into World War I and Post-War subsections.
I think a little more detail all round would help so that the quotes/citations, though worthwhile in themselves, don't overbalance the article.

Cheers, Ian Rose 13:31, 31 July 2007 (UTC)[reply]