Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/John Churchill, 1st Duke of Marlborough

John Churchill, 1st Duke of Marlborough edit

Request a review from my peers. Is the Info box OK? I my want to add a legacy section later on but the article is already 63Kb long! Would this not be advisable? What's the policy on 'succession boxes'? Any general comments would be nice. Thank you. Raymond Palmer 15:34, 6 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]

Kirill Lokshin edit

Overall: magnificent, utterly magnificent. The article is truly a pleasure to read; stylistically, it's the Bishonen, Geogre, Giano, et al. school of FA-writing.

As far as suggestions from me:

The infobox looks good, but I would suggest replacing the hypens with normal bullet points (•) in the list of battles.
There are still a number of quotes in the article that don't seem to be cited; that needs to be fixed.
Succession boxes would be useful, particularly for the various offices he held.
A section on his legacy (and, more generally, on the historiography dealing with him) would be a good idea; but, as you mention, the article is already quite long. It's possibly long enough that people would complain on FAC; I can see two different methods for reducing the length:
- Moving some of the more tangential remarks into the footnotes, which don't count (since it's only the prose length that's considered).
- Tightening some of the more redundant wording; for example:
  - "The following year in 1673" → "The following year" or "In 1673"
  - "overall command of His Majesty’s forces chosen to face Monmouth" → "overall command of the forces chosen to face Monmouth"
  - And so forth
All the day/month combinations should be linked so that reader date preferences can work properly.

I think this'll be ready for FAC soon; keep up the great work! Kirill Lokshin 03:18, 7 February 2007 (UTC)[reply]