Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/22nd Regiment Massachusetts Volunteer Infantry

22nd Regiment Massachusetts Volunteer Infantry edit

I know, another Massachusetts Civil War unit. Don't worry, it's really just the 21st (already done) and 22nd that I'm interested in. (Although at some future date, it's not impossible that another should come down the pipeline). I am hoping to nominate this for A class. Any comments, suggestions, etc. to improve the article would be appreciated. Thanks! Historical Perspective (talk) 23:18, 1 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

AustralianRupert edit

It looks quite good to me, but I don't have specific content knowledge. As such, my comments are mainly cosmetic:

In the Organization section, this needs a citation: "To this regiment were attached the 3rd Battery Massachusetts Light Artillery and the 2nd Company Massachusetts Sharpshooters. Thus, the 22nd Massachusetts became one of the few infantry units in the Civil War with attached artillery and sharpshooters";
In the Organization section, this needs a citation: "During its first winter of service, the 22nd remained at Hall's Hill and became proficient in military drill"
In the Siege of Yorktown section, this needs a citation: "Despite this, McClellan believed he faced a much larger force and settled in for a month-long siege of Yorktown";
Siege of Yorktown section, last paragraph, "1st brigade, 1st division, V Corps": brigade and division should be capitalised as they are proper nouns;
In the Battle of Gaines' Mill section, this needs a citation: "On June 26, Gen. Robert E. Lee, who had recently taken command of the Army of Northern Virginia, launched a daring counter-offensive intended to drive McClellan's army away from Richmond. For the 22nd, the third day of the Seven Days Battles, the Battle of Gaines' Mill, proved to be devastating as they suffered their worst casualties of the war";
In the first paragraph of the Camp Gove section, the value "1 mile" could have a {{convert}} template added to it to show equivalent distance;
last sentence of the opening paragraph of the Gettsyburg campaign section probably needs a citation;
I suggest rewording the last sentence of the Battle of Gettysburg campaign to: "In terms of percentages, this represented the regiment's highest number of casualties in an individual battle";
The final sentence of the Mustering out seciton probably needs a citation.

Anyway, that is it from me. You may do with these what you see fit. Good work so far and good luck with improving the article. Cheers. — AustralianRupert (talk) 12:47, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Response. Thanks very much for your comments. All very helpful. I've done all of the above. Regards, Historical Perspective (talk) 21:59, 6 April 2010 (UTC)[reply]