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I've listed this article for peer review because… I'd like to get this article to GA and eventually FA status. There is a plethora of information available on the song's unique musical composition and many critics have analyzed the song in the context of the group's musical reinvention. I believe this makes the article a very interesting read. A lot of the information I've added is regarding the band's reinvention and the musical composition of the song (e.g. lots of technical terms). I've written from the perspective of a U2 fan and someone with some knowledge of musical concepts, so I'd like it perhaps if an outsider could give this article a review to make sure that it can be properly understood by all.
Thanks, Y2kcrazyjoker4 (talk) 20:45, 25 January 2010 (UTC)
- Overall this is at least GA quality, but a few things stick out.
- The composition and reception sections contain too many quotes. While some quotes are fine, they should be used more sparingly. The composition section needs more work of the two.
- Personnel list should either find a way to be incorporated into a list in the composition section or removed as trivial, repeat info. It doesn't really add anything that cannot be shown in prose well enough.
- Some external links might be appropriate, such as linking to the bands websites.陣内Jinnai 23:36, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
Could you be more specific about certain things that you would do? I'm not sure how I would eliminate quotes from the article. Y2kcrazyjoker4 (talk) 03:24, 1 February 2010 (UTC)
- Okay I'll give an example:
- Guitarist The Edge says "Danny [Lanois] provided an incredibly mad intro which sounds like a keyboard, but is in fact guitar on which I'm creating strange textures."[1]
- Guitarist The Edge explains that the keyboard sound in the intro is actually a guitar.
- I'm not the best with prose, but I hope you get the idea. Whether you think this particular line is better quoted or not is an editorial decision you have to make, but the number of quotes needs to be trimmed down. Read it over and decide what quotes really stick out and keep those while paraphrasing the others.陣内Jinnai 06:06, 1 February 2010 (UTC)