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Tyrannosauridae

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I've listed this article for peer review because I've expanded it and I want to submit it for GA. Thanks, Nergaal (talk) 22:52, 13 September 2008 (UTC)

Comments from Dabomb87 (talk · contribs)

• "Unlike most other groups of dinosaurs, most tyrannosaurids are known from very complete remains." "known from" confuses me.
• "This has allowed a wide variety of research into their biology."
• "Alioramus is known from the remains of an individual estimated at between 5 and 6 meters (16.5 to 20 ft) long" Same issue as above.
• "Tyrannosaurus, Tarbosaurus, and Daspletosaurus had skulls which exceeded 1 meter (3.3 ft) in length,[10] with the largest Tyrannosaurus skull measuring over 1.5 meters (5 ft) long." with + -ing constuction makes for an awkward read.
• "Unlike earlier tyrannosauroids and most other theropods, however, the maxillary and mandibular teeth of mature tyrannosaurids are not blade-like but extremely thickened and often circular in cross-section."
• "Tyrannosauridae is uncontroversially divided into two subfamilies." Why is "uncontroversially" specified, readers will assume that.
• "such as FMNH PR2081 ("Sue") most likely weighed over 5400 kg (6 short tons)" Short tons has already been linked in the lead.
• "There is some limited evidence of social behavior among some of the tyrannosaurids."
• "It has also been proposed that tyrannosaurids had such protofeathers." "proposed" doesn't seem to be the right word, maybe "theorized"?
• "Bony crests are found on the skulls of many theropods, including numerous tyrannosaurids." "numerous" is vague.

Dabomb87 (talk) 02:24, 19 September 2008 (UTC)