Wikipedia:Peer review/Tourism in Indonesia/archive1
Tourism in Indonesia edit
This is the Indonesian collaboration of the week article, starting on yesterday (August 21). However, I have seen many improvements compared to the one before some guys working actively on the article (but I can't find the history). Oh well, thanks for your review. Take care -- Imoeng 10:11, 22 August 2006 (UTC)
- Unfortunately I haven't got time today to have as thorough a look as I'd like. I've given some of the sections a quick copyedit, but it would benefit from a good run through. Some brief points:
- It needs a lot more references.
- Inline citations should come after the punctuation per WP:MOS
- "The Wallacea biogeographical destination defines the western part of Indonesia (Sumatra, Java, Kalimantan) have the same flora and fauna characteristics with the Asian continent." - couldn't make head nor tail of this sentence. I took a guess at copyediting it, but you should check it.
- Komodo dragons are found on islands other than just Komodo
- "Metropolitan tourism including shopping, sightseeing in big cities and enjoying modern amusement parks." - this is orphaned.
- "which is usually favoured by the upper classes, including foreigners" - are all foreigners included in "the upper classes" or are only upper-class foreigners covered by this statement?
- " However, an application is compulsory to both VOA and visa-free countries" - can't work out what that means.