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I've listed this article for peer review because…I feel this is good enough for GA-class, has excellent information for all those interested in this season for Tottenham Hotspur F.C. with a good collection of citations.


Thanks, Govvy (talk) 20:58, 8 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]


Comments
  • There are some weasel words that need sorting, for example "Tottenham were earmarked by many..." Earmarked by who?
  Done Have removed that sentence, Govvy (talk) 20:05, 7 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Some of the dates are not in the standard format specified in the manual of style. May 11th, 2008 should be 11 May 2008.
  Not done I will check through the dates, but I wont link to dates, as that has now changed. Govvy (talk) 16:26, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Per WP:DASH, you need to use the dash, rather than the hyphen for scores and seasons. So 2-1 should be 2–1, and 2007-08 should be 2007–08.
  • I don't think you should hide your references, they are important. I'm not sure if there is a policy or guideline on this though.
  Not done I am not sure what this refers too. Govvy (talk) 16:56, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The last sentence in the main prose section ("With the 2008-09 season set to begin...") is problematic. It is too long, heavily point of view and is not cited. In general the prose section could do with a few more citations.
  Done Must have been removed by someone else. Govvy (talk) 16:56, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Numbers less than ten are generally written in words, so "7 points" would become "seven points" for example.
  Done done by someone else. Govvy (talk) 16:56, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • The Premier League table is a little busy, colour-wise. If I'm reading this article, I'm interested to find out where Spurs finished so this should be immediately obvious. I would therefore probably not colour in any of the other teams, or at least make Spurs more prominent in the table.

Hope this helps for starters. --Jameboy (talk) 21:30, 8 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from ChrisTheDude (talk · contribs) edit

Quite a bit of work to do here, I think. Specifically........

  • Lead is only one sentence, it needs expanding massively
  Done Have expanded it. Govvy (talk) 16:35, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "5th" should be "fifth"
  Done The noted section was removed in the end to be more neutral Govvy (talk) 17:02, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Tottenham were earmarked by many" - like who? Desperately needs a source. In fact the first three paragraphs (with the exception of one sentence) are completely unreferenced.
  Done Have removed "Tottenham were earmarked by many" Govvy (talk) 20:04, 7 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "The Premier league 2007-08 season" - "League" should have a capital, also this should be wikilinked
  Done Govvy (talk) 23:28, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Sunderland not wikilinked
  Fixed Govvy (talk) 23:28, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  Done was done by someone else. Govvy (talk) 16:45, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "7 points" should be "seven points"
  Done was done by someone else. Govvy (talk) 16:45, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Tottenham continued to demonstrate poor form" - POV, needs to be rewritten
  Removed Have rewritten to be neutral. Govvy (talk) 23:28, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "This disastrous start" - POV, needs to be rewritten
  Removed Have rewritten to be neutral. Govvy (talk) 23:28, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Manchester City et al need to be wikilinked
  Done by someone else. Govvy (talk) 23:28, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Top 4" should be "top four"
  Done The bit which you note was removed. Govvy (talk) 17:02, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Uefa Cup" should be "UEFA Cup"
  Done by someone else. Govvy (talk) 17:02, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • "during Spurs' loss to Getafe in the Uefa Cup, It was....." - "it shouldn't have a capital letter in the middle of a sentence
  • Currently Martin Jol is wikilinked the second time his name is mentioned, but not the first - should be the other way round
  Fixed Was fixed by someone else. Govvy (talk) 23:28, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • No need to wikilink Juande Ramos three times in three consecutive sentences
  Done by someone else. Govvy (talk) 17:02, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Blackpool not wikilinked
  Done Someone has already done it. Govvy (talk) 17:27, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Standard practice is to use unsponsored names of competitions therefore it should be Football League Cup, not Carling Cup
  • " a 2-0 win over Blackpool in the Carling Cup, Immediately following...." - I think "immediately" is meant to be starting a new sentence, so there should be a full stop after "Cup", not a comma
  • "it was made clear in the public forum...." - reference?
  • "Carling cup" - capital letter needed on "Cup"
  • "ending Citys' 100% home record." - should be "City's"
  • Dates not correctly formatted/wikilinked eg January 27 2008
  • "Spurs went out of the FA Cup Fourth Round" - more accurate to simply say they went out of the FA Cup
  • "went out of the FA Cup Fourth Round to a 3-1 defeat at the hands of Manchester United at Old Trafford. Tottenham took the lead through Robbie Keane but eventually lost to Manchester United" - as you've already established they were playing Man U, it is not necessary to state who they lost to
  • "league cup" should be capitalised, also it is wikilinked to a disambig page rather than an article
  • "Tottenham were eliminated from the UEFA cup in the last 16 round by PSV, The first leg...." - no need to wikilink Tottenham yet again, "cup" should be capitalised, and sentence once again ends with a comma
  • "heralded a 1-0 defeat for tottenham" - capital needed on the club's name (occurs again in the next sentence)
  • "Tottenham's achievements ranging from terrible football...." - playing "terrible football" is hardly an achievement!
  • "Tottenham are, once again, being tipped as a team to challenge the top 4" - once again, completely unsourced weasel words
  • "....will mean the Tottenham fans, and indeed the club itself, will be expectant of that also, but if one thing is for sure, that is Tottenham will be adamant that they vastly improve on their mid-table finish of this season." - completely unsourced, written in an unencyclopedic style, could be dispensed with completely
  • Manay headings use unnatural capitals eg "Premier League Table" - no need for a capital T
  • Ditch all the colour in the table, it looks horrible
  • "The team kit for the 2007-08 season is produced by Puma and the main shirt sponsor is Mansion" - should be in past tense, the season is over
  Done I think someone else did that. Govvy (talk) 17:25, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why is the "Injury List" in an apparently completely random order?
  • Friendlies - some have attendance as "N/A" - did nobody turn up? If the figure wasn't reported, better to put "not reported" or similar
  Done changed as suggested. Govvy (talk) 17:25, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Personally I would put commas in the attendance figures eg 30,000 not 30000
  Done been through the article and added commas. Govvy (talk) 17:20, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  • Why are the references hidden? There's only 39, so it's hardly going to unduly extend the article to show them
  Fixed I assume they were hidden at some point by someone else fixed that. Govvy (talk) 17:20, 8 March 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hope the above helps! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 08:04, 9 July 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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